Wonderful story. I has really captured me as a reader. I wonder how u are going to explain the feeling Nika had, the whaite cage? Anyways I like the converstaions bits they are funny are u going to do one of them with Talent in? Love the story. Thx for letting me read it.

Yay! Fangroar's back! Does the fact that Nika hugged him signify that she has a soft spot for him? o, how sweet! So a big bad dark evil is coming hey? I so can't wait to see it, it's gonna be great! I know what it's like plotting to destroy the world. Fun, fun, fun. I'm in the middle of doing that now. Anyway, keep up the excellent work, and update real soon, ok?

This is really good. i love how you describe the place so vividly i can almost see it for real. you are a great writer.

oommggod! KEEP WRITING~! I LOVE THIS STORY
HEY AND MALICE GOTTA HOOK UP! AND ZETH AND THE CREATURE AND MYA AND JADE... that would be perfect! lol- strange me!

OMG! SHE NEEDS TO FALL IN LOVE WITH THAT ELF DUDE!

HEY!
OMG! I'M SO HAPPY ABOUT THIS CHAPTER THAT I PRESSED CAPSLOCK TOO HARD AND NOW IT WON'T "POP" BACK UP LIKE IT'S SUPPOSED TO! TALENT IS THE BEST! CAN YOU GIVE HIM A WEAPON THAT IS COOLER THAN ZETH'S? AND MAYBE A JESTER'S COSTUME THAT IS EVEN BRIGHTER THAN HERS AS WELL! AS LONG AS ZETH STAYS JEALOUS. I WAS ALSO THINKING YOU SHOULD MAKE NIKA AND MYA AGREE TO HIS IDEAS AND NOT ZETH'S!
GO TALENT. MAKE HIM ... HM ... I WAS GOING TO SUGGEST PART ANIMAL ... BUT I THE FIRST ANIMAL TO COME TO MIND WAS A PARROT ... A PARROT? HOW DID THAT GET HERE? STUPID BACKSPACE BUTTON IS STUCK NOW TOO ... I CAN'T ERASE IT!
VERY SHORT CHAPTER THIS WAS, MAYBE MORE DESCRIPTION ON TALENT WOULD HAVE MADE IT BETTER ... OR TALENT AND "CLICK" HIS FINGERS AND MAKE IT ALL BETTER...IF HE EVEN REMEMBERS HOW TO "CLICK"!

Alright then here I go: ...blood and grim. It should be grime. As for the Master's last words I think something more like "until your time has ended as well." Seems more fitting since I got the whole sage like persona from him. As for the end, I got confused, reread it and understood it more, but I guess I shouldn't be reading so late at night anyway! Also I hear the battle scenes, I can smell them and with a bit MORE detail I think I could taste them as well. So far I think I enjoyed this chapter the best.

ut oh.. we can't have our heroine out cold! it just doesn't work that way! jeeze.. girl.. screwin with our whole system...

Talent's cool! I'm liking him already! He reminds me a lot of Zeth, and I get the feeling that either those two are going to get along really well, or Zeth is going to get totally fed up with him. Or so totally jealous of his yellow vest that she goes all axe-murderer on him. Could be funny.
Wow. I love Jade's idea of execution. Definately something straight out of 'dark souls', and I love it! Very graphic, very cool!
I hate writer's block too! I've got a small dose of it now, so I'm not doing too much work on 'forgotten'. Instead, I'm working on ideas for the last story of the trilogy. I hate it when I get ahead of myself, but hey, you get that.
Anyway, I hope the writer's block passes, and I hope you write more soon! I definately want to know what happened to Nika! And who Talent is, and if Zeth trys to steal his vest, and what Jade's gonna do now that she has Jinus all to herself, and when Malice and Maya are gonna come back...Argh! Write more soon, Please!

Wow...snow in Jinus, you didn't say anything about the people's reactions! Or is that in the next chapter?
I like this secret passages theme, it's cool. As for Gunnar, I had nearly forgotten about Zeth's brother! There wasn't much of Nika and Zeth in this one, I knew there was something missing hehehe. I like the line about mushrooms, sounds intriguing...

wow.. lots of bloodshed aye? don't know whether to congradulate her or tattle to nika! lol

Course I'm still reading! I love this story! I love the coldness of Jade, and her ruthlessness and arrogance...I love her character! I hope Zeth's brother is gonna be ok. So, Jade now has control of Jinus? Cool. I can't wait to find out what Nika's gonna think about that. I'm pictureing a showdown between the two. Anyway, keep writing! I love this story!

Things picking up! Good I luv action!
By the way thanks for the praise it was real nice!
Looking forward to more(once again!)

Hey!
Great chapter, I extremely liked Zeth's 'innocent' comments!
Stupid Lantara, stupid bird, go Nika for throwing it out the window, just what it deserves!
"Nika, get Zeth some proper clothes, and find some way to get rid of that ridiculous looking jester costume, what would people think if they saw a wonderful captain like you with a blue faced, blue haired nymph dressed in a jester's costume as your emblem?"

Is it just me or does Nika seem out of place wherever she goes? I don't just mean that in a physical sense that she doesn't belong anywhere, but that she isn't written into the story as deeply as the other characters. Nika talks too much...go Mya! Ha ha ha! *wink