|Reviews for Carbon|
| Jack Cackler chapter 8 . 3/31/2004
...Utterly captivating. The depressing mood you managed to set was perfect for the story, and its pace and style never allowed me to lose interest. A good read.
HOWEVER, as good stories do, this one still has its drawbacks. If you want to make it really effective, I'd suggest tying in the 'discovering oneself' theme a little more in the plot. You know, add a little more foreshadowing of the end. Another thing which bothered me was Stacy's sudden decision to declare his feelings for Lena. I felt I didn't understand where this came from. Perhaps you could elaborate on that a little more. Finally, the hospital scene will have a lot more impact if you could somehow tie it in with the theme of the rest of the story.
Now don't get me wrong, I stick to my statement that this story is an excellent read. I just think you can make it even better.
| OpenEyes2Beauty chapter 8 . 1/3/2004
wow i love it i love it. the part i like the most in stories is when everything starts to fall into place adn u remember little hints and clues and then everything clicks and you're like oh. you did a great job with that. the change in lena kinda surprised me, and how stacy went so fast from sobbing over her to wanting to set her on fire. the end of chapter 8 was a lil confusing...was he talking to Nicky beacuse the last line he called her Lena, i think, and that confused me. i really like the carbon thing and all the other similies or metaphors or whatnot you put in there everywhere. its what i like most about the story, what makes it fun. keep up the great work! love ya girl
| michelle chapter 5 . 1/2/2004
hey wow i really like this...esp the lil thing about life and variables and imbalanced equations, thats really really neat. i think the blonde stacys in love with is annoying, kinda reminds me of avril lavignes song skater boy. i hate avril lavigne. anyways...i like how u built stacys relationship with his mom, and the whole little flashback and how he used to call his mom mommy, i like that u didnt leave that out. ur middle school caste system is extremely accurate haha. i like it, i just hope this doesnt turn out to be The New Guy-some loser turns around and melts the walls between the cliques...its really unrealistic and thats annoying. just keep writing, please, you have a great start
| Liviania chapter 5 . 11/13/2003
You've really got high school down-pretty accurate picture of the caste system. What was so horrible waiting at his house?
| DOLL chapter 4 . 10/12/2003
I WANT MORE!
Please don't abandon this story! It's good!
| Missy chapter 4 . 9/29/2003
I WANT MORE! i really like this story!
| playmatemisfit when in chapter 4 . 9/24/2003
wow i really like this...still. lol. i like how at the end you kinda leave the reader hangin. i can relate to her little cruch. lol. i bet every1 can. keep thoughts on paper,
| PlayMateMisfit chapter 1 . 9/18/2003
wow, i REALLY like this. i can also relate very well. you sereiously need to add more chaps, i wanna read more.
- keep thoughts on paper,
| LiteAMatch4IDeserveToBurn chapter 1 . 9/16/2003
very well done. you sound like you konw what you're talking about. pretty dark, too, which is nice. i like how it's told in the present tense.