|Reviews for My Life|
| IHJ chapter 1 . 11/21/2003
*laugh* Making puppy faces, ehm?
Well, you already know I'm starting to get tired of the "fears" and "tears" rhyme. But knowing me, I'd probably use it one day. ;)
Well done with the personification, the imagery in the first stanza is good.
It's probably only me who feels this way, but with the constant throwing around of the word "angst" on this site, seeing it in your poem made me go "hmm" in a slight disapproving way.
Again, a good poem. Not one of your best, but it does have flow and it's wonderfully easy and fantastic to visualize the lady.
| Schizophrenic Doll chapter 1 . 10/5/2003
beautiful, this i understand perfectly, oh i do love it.
| Cirien Phoenix chapter 1 . 9/26/2003
Hey, there! This is freakin awesome. Actually I wrote something similar to this, but I can't remember if I bothered to post it anywhere. Probably not... This is really good though. The only thing is:
soul heart and mind I pour
That needs to be separated with commas. You could even make this into a short story about split personality. Later,
Cirien Phoenix of the Eternal Phlame
| Trinity Joselyn Carter chapter 1 . 9/26/2003
wow that was really good! i liked it alot and i think i am crying again... well that may be cuz i'm in a shitty mood but this brought it on again.