Hmm this is... uh... interesting its original though so I liked it... you write pretty well and i really sont care for grammar myself so dont worry its only kind of confusing when you switch back and forth between characters so randomly. I am assuming this is suppose to show the dependancy on an object in our society and how we will bring on own our deestruction without it? Hmm interesting.. keep writing

Nice longer bit. The situations are realistic, as well as the fact that they'd all be yelling at each other. One thing I found somewhat unnerving, though, is the frequent change in Liz's name toward the end. I know you were going for variety, but it's somewhat awkward to read "Liz" "Lizzy" and then "Elizabeth". Just a thought. But, nice job with this chapter.

Kudos and daisies.

-Jess

There were a few grammar changes, but nothing entirely too big. An I actually like what you've done with this so far. I'd recommend maybe having longer chapters and sections for each character (though I'm sure you're going to do that anway.) Very nice effect with how you did it, and well-written. Good job with changing how each of the lights ended at each time, i.e. "Then everything went dark...", "when the screen went blank and the lights failed", and "The world was dark." Nice job, Megs. Good beginning.

Kudos and daisies.

-Jess