That is better than Harry Potter! Ha! I love it. But it made me sad, don't ask why.

Hi, Allie.

Your story is really good. you might want to show, not tell more (Ex- instead of saying the robots had laser beam eyes, you could say they shot laser beams from their eyes at Bub.)

It was a really good story, overall, and i wouldn't mind more detail, even if there are too many words. Good stories are better than short ones.

Yay! It made me laugh out loud! The EVIL SUSHI LADY had a very lovely character. Very imaginative, good job! Wow, lots of exclimations points- that's always a good sign, if you ask me.