Sharply poignant, showing the truth of the hollow lives that many lead for others' sakes. I like. . \m/

wow, that line at the end is a little macabre, isn't it? lol i loved it! (obsessed with anything morbidly fascinating) Just one thing: you could throw in some parallelism or internal rhyme or alliteration or assonance to add some pizazz, or something.

::loved it::

RM