ok where is the rest please upload soon because I'm loking forward to reading this just please tell me your going to upload soon.

My friend has a theory that most of the stories on fp are crap. So far, this does not break that theory.

"King Acheron, King Acheron," a tall, reedy man rode into the courtyard, the horse near exhaustion,"

King Acheron is a really generic sounding name. Your first sentence has too many structural flaws for me to bother pointing them out.

""the Prime Evils are attacking the Guardians of time for the eight keys!" he cried."

I stop here. That is two really, painfully generic fantasy stereotypes that you are using in a remarkably unoriginal manner. This story fails before it can begin.

Editing is a good thing.

Great I loved it!

O_O! THIS HAS GOTTEN VERY GOOD! ::gonna add it to my fav's so I don't forget about it like I have been!::

Well then... cliffhangers. *grins* one of the more effective ways of getting reviews.
*scolding tone* now get to your computer and get another chapter up so i can breath again.
Gryph

coo.. teehee, i'm in your story! . i still find it odd how i'm always in your spanish dialogues, though... ;;

hahaha, rich? ::snorts:: silly wantin... i'm not rich! ; whatever. 'tis a story, so i'll learn to accept it. hehe.

oh, and who's justin and joe and chris and michael? ;; anyone real?

baii.

-karina! _

Nice chap - I like the premise. It'll be interesting to watch the THE group tackle something of extreme importance... you always wonder if those pop people just rely on their status to make them important... give them a task and see if they can earn it.

The chaps are short (which actually I like - it gets tedius reading a long one online sometimes), but you're getting something accomplished in each one, which is good. The only thing I see (trying to be a "well-rounded reviewer" *sighs*) is some minor grammatical stuff (eg: "Was this one of god's joke" - should be "jokes"). Otherwise it's very well-written. As for the "slow" updates... that darn school...

Keep updating when those teachers allow _~

It is a very good story. I loved it. I am in yuor spanish class and I thought it was wonderful!

ok...now i'm caught up...

so now we know who's who, aye?

i like the thought of the keys.. tis cool...

(don't worry...school is taking up time's time...)lol

i'm officially ticked off at fiction press... do you know i did NOT get an alert for this chapter? gr...

oh wel... still good.. great way to set up insights into the characters with only a few words.. very cool..

Interesting... keep updating and I'll keep reading. (like the THE group angle - I can see that getting interesting)

heyy, this is the one i read during spanish yesterday!

'tis good. . update soon! ::waves rubber bands threateningly::

-karina

o... this could be interesting... can't wait to see who they are in 2003...