*rolls eyes* I would have NEVER NEVER have noticed you updated if I hadn't been going the review that other thing... Ah well. - Anyway, nice. Update before I'm 23, k? K. Good. Bai!

I like the bios, they give more details on the characters. Tika seems neat;)

Yes! You finally updated! Great job! You made a lot less errors in this chapter. I really like the story so far, although if you added more detail it would give me better mental images to see while I read. Well, keep writing;)

Fascinating.
Geez, kid, wait for your beta reader. She's been busy, but she'll still help ya! *pretends to cry*
On the bios thing. You know what I said, I won't embarrass you. You know you shouldn't.
Gotta cut it short.
Later days,
- D.L.

XD Good job! Hurry up and post another chapter *whap* Hee hee...*munches me two minties* Ah...minty freshness. Hee. Well, I saw a few spelling mistakes, but those are all fine-n-dandy...One of them that I can remember off the top of my head was celebration...You spelled it celibration.
Um...I'm done now 8D *continues munching my mints all happy-like*
-How can they see when the sun has faded and the moon is dead?-
Mouse

Nice chapter, just a wee bit short! lol!
Nothing wrong with it at all, just update more and write more! _
And one other thing... YOU STOLE THE NAME DAEDONDA FROM MY CHARACTER DAEDA! sorry just had to vent... lol
Good work, so keep it up! And yes that means update BEFORE 2005!
David
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I reviewed! FINALLY! lol!

Yet again, NOTHING wrong with this chapter! Nice descriptions, and a good fantasy layout. the only thing i would think of, is to take more time introducing each character, and give a bit of background to them, unless you WANT them to be unknown and mysterious!

Anyway, keep it up!

David

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Okay, well, Im not sure what to make of it so far. It's certainly interesting and I liked the second chapter, but Im a little confused. AU setting, magical stuff and warriors -yeah, that always gets me. But it really isnt bad for your first story. Mine was/is so much worse and simple and cliched.

Original is definitely the word for this. You've gotten your own setting and characters, so thats all good.

Dont be discouraged. You should write more soon and develop things further. If I didnt like it I wouldnt have reviewed, so dont think Im lying.

PS -That wasnt so bad was it? Im not such a meanie.

My eyes bleed at your all-caps words.

That was good _ You should update more often *whacks with a stick* Only problem I saw this time was Daedonda shouldn't have already been able to do an elemental technique if this was his first time. Then again lots of people tend to do that, so it's not that bad XD *pats head* Hmm...*grins* I can already see a few things about where the plot's going..*cackles insanely* WEE! I KNOW ALL! FEAR ME! *runs around in circles like a chicken with its head cut off*

O.o; That's enough 'humor' for this review. Good job, and update before I sick this chicken on you! *holds up a chicken threateningly*

-In the court of King Chaos only blood can write its own tragedy-

D.D.

I like the story so far! Keep up the great work. The first chapter does have a lot of mistakes in it, but I think you commented on that writing:)

Hello 'Lone Shadow'. *laughs duly*

Thank you for the cookies... *chews on them dully*

The story is really good! Better then your, well excuse me for critizing..., shit back in .

Well anyway, talk to you latter, and keep up the good work!

~Kairi

Hey _ Good story, just you need to watch your spelling, grammar, etc...Seems like a good plot overall _ Well...

That's it, I guess O.o Continue

-May the spoofs guide you-

Mouse

wow!

finally!

i can actually review!

so many authors here dont allow reviews from anonymous readers..thank god i can review here!

ur starting off great but theres so much dialogue!

maybe u could cut down on the dialogue a bit as it makes the story more intersting and easier to read and understand

newayz...keep on writing!

I really liked the way you kind of mixed a asian topic and gave it sort of an american sence of humer and style. I also like the way you cut to some action right in the 1st chapter to grab attention. Try to keep the combat as detailed as possable in the chapters to come. I noticed a few problems with quotations and tenths but other than that it was really good. I'm looking forward to read the next chapter.