good chapter.

I read it and I didn't like it. obviously it wasn't a chapter meant to be liked. I didn't like the referal to years as well. But as you said it was nessecary although it didn't make sence in my mind.

"Racing for the position already? Gee and yesterday you wanted to run away from here. What changed your mind?"

That was funny. lol. I like the word sire as well. Interesting, I don't read it often.

This was a very well written chapter. The feelings where conveyed very well. I don't know what I would have done differently in her position. What could she do besides get herself killed? And throw food at that guy... ggr.

I also don't take head-ache pills if I can help it. I think that the last lord of the rings book was a bit monotonous, with all the dark land and stuff.

I don't really want to plague this review with irrelevant stuff so I'll stop now.

Very interesting chapter.

Keir suits his name. Did you do that on purpose? Un-stable vampires are always very interesting to read about.

It was a bit strange ... how Bram told his version of 'that night' and she re-acted very well to it.

It isn't heavy reading, but it isn't light; that's good. I knew what I was going to say but I forgot. *laughs* sorry.

*Smiles* don't worry I'll stick with the story, I mean I survived the third lord of the rings book I can get through almost anything right?

I write some hectic stuff sometimes, I don't know how I get through it.

I didn't find the first chapters confusing (I haven't yet...) and it was nice to get a reply to the reviews. I tend to refer to all medicine as pills, don't know why. yeah, all medicine freaks me out... just the idea of it. I mean what is it really? lol.

gtg.

I found time.

very interesting.

I would have stopped reading after this chapter, if it wheren't for three things.

1) I know she is/will be queen

2) I really want to know why Bram left so quickly and how he will react to her know (that will probably deside if I read on -forgive me)

3)They're vampires... you're a good writer... And I'm curious.

I can't stand slavery... I also write it, but often I feel sick at the thought.

now unfortunatly I have to go, I'll will read more.

cheers

it flows very nicily in the chapter. From her suspesions to her feelings and yeah... your writing is inspiring, but it doesn't hold me well

-I have a lot on my mind though so I'm just distrated. I don't think anything could hold my attention well right now.

"... for I can not see past your eyes, and as you know

eyes are the window to the soul."~ I loved that.

keep up the good work.

bex

Hey, I'm back... sort of.

It's very slow reading. Not light at all, but the good bits get you hooked. It's good.

I like the sound of Bram, I atomatical hate the doctor. And the idea of her just taking pills like that... *shivers*

I relate well to Toni, I was never fat but I used to have temper problems and I took refuge in solitude until we moved. *Smiles* And I like the way she thinks.

I can't wait to see what happens next.

P.S. last time I reviews the "blank"s where just a thing... I can't explain. I thoughts stuff but I couldn't put it in words.

cheers.

this is great!

come on and keep up the good work!

write write and write!

Big Crash? Um...you do know that it's the Big Crunch, right?

I defiantly thought more than 500 thoughts a minute while reading that.

I’m out in unknown territory now. My world is no where near perfection. Education is frowned upon but excepted, the aliens didn’t like the look of the place, so they turned away after sending THE message.

But my people or happy in there own twisted sense of the word.

Lol.

Technology isn’t doing to badly though.

I’m gonna share a few of my thoughts when reading this.

1)Ag the format! It’s eating my eyes!

2)Gnab Gib from the hick hiker guild to the galaxy. (p.s. Big Bang backwards Ganb Gib or Gib Ganb)

3)Blank, blank, blank

4)Shock

5)Horror

6)Where are the artists? I see an opportunity

7)I bet the pranksters will love it there… unsuspecting victims.

I don’t think interest count’s as a thought, but it was there. I must say while reading one of the first three paragraphs I defiantly sensed disaster. I like to try guess what’s going to happen next, but I’m not going to hazard a guess now.

Sorry my review was so long. It usually isn’t. I guess I’m suffering from pre-internet-loss-trauma.

I liked it a lot. I usually don’t review the first chapter (mean but true).

:) :D :p

well. I hope to be back to read the rest sooner than later.

Bex.

PLEASE! Post another chapter soon. i have been waiting for what seems like forever and i really like your story!

these are such great ideas! i can't think of how you got htese ideas. they are great!

i don't why you have so few reviews. i don't really review but i just wanted u to know tha ti like your story gr8tly. it is not the best that i have read, no offense, but it is one of the better ones. i love this idea. i've never read one like htis before. i thought that i have read every vampire story already because i read a lot a lot a lot. have you read Twilight yet? if u didn't you should definitly read it. it's sequel came out this august!

Wow, awsome chapter. I hope you update soon, I realy don't like cliff hangers. I can't wait to see what is going to happen.