|Reviews for Something's Wrong|
| ccazale chapter 1 . 9/24/2005
THATS EXACTLY the way i feel when i can tell people lie to me because i did somthing wrong, and its so obvious that they're lying
| Soviet chapter 1 . 9/16/2004
Intresting... but there are some strange things:
"Your expression blank
Like dark winter skies"
- doesn't seem to flow all that great
"It would have all been ok
I would of understood"
- the wording doesn't make sence.. 'would of understand'.. is that an error or some special rule of gramar?
"Cried myself, and wiped your tears away"
- Good line, but too seems too long for this poem
| Dawn of Fire chapter 1 . 12/27/2003
Ah, I know this feeling well. Kind of like my "Open Your Eyes" except less violent/angry and more supporting. _
| picklehater chapter 1 . 10/10/2003
I love your writing! Your poetry actually has depth and meaning to it, it's about stuff that people actually want to read and learn from.
I love ya, keep up the good work!:D
| Jane Austen the 2nd chapter 1 . 10/9/2003
Great theme! I think everyone can relate! You sure you can't think of a title? This is really good work though. The flow and rhyme scheme are really great and incoperate your ideas.