Reviews for Search for the Successor
EisoftheSnow chapter 1 . 3/20/2004
woah! that was alotta info in one bout!
The idea is great, you may want to make it alittle more clear on who's talking though. I got a little confused, but its not that serious of a thing that needs to be redone right away. Otherwise, I LOVED IT! the image of the city, the village attacked - just marvolus!
Wrider chapter 1 . 1/11/2004
Two things: First, your imagery is absolutely splendid, I thoroughly enjoyed it and what it added to this chapter. It really was great! Second, a minor thing, but in dialogue, whever a new person speaks it should be a new paragraph - just so it's easier to follow who's talking and such. Otherwise, I think this is a great start for a story and I hope you continue, again, your imagery and choice of words was wonderful!
Aisatsana chapter 1 . 1/2/2004
hey!
thanx for ur review!
I think this is a good story so far! I hope u dont mind if i make a few suggestions... maybe start of with something more exciting in the begining.. "In a far away land.." is a little cliche.. and has a kind of droning quality to it. I think it would interest readers a lot more if you started with something different.. Also, I think you could do a lot with the part where the king and queen are found dead..maybe describe the event itself?
Anyways good work! I'm interested in seeing where this story goes!
~Aisatsana
Xiao Lao Hu chapter 1 . 10/23/2003
Hey!

You've got a really good story going! Keep adding to it! I can't wait to read more. I love the storyline! You should bring in a funny character, or a silly or confused one.

Write more!
Flames and Shadows chapter 1 . 10/11/2003
That was GOOD! write more, NOW!

but i don't likw Isle, she's too much of a cry baby in my mind, Sharnew is cool, he killed people, funny. I like the part where the village burns. Isle is like 'oh No!' and i was like 'Hehe your all going to die and you can't stop it cause Syrelen boss of the story.'

It's cool, hehe die.