I like this poem. Good job.

um... I can tell you really like this person, but this poem has nothing to it. Yeah, sure, you're tellingher how pretty and special she is to you, and basically describing her, but this poem sparks nothing in the hearts of the people reading it. It's kinda like sitting around and listening to someone describe someone else, though using extremely primitive language. Add some flare to this. Something. Get a thesaurus. Look up every other word that you used to describe her and find a better word. Or just reword things so that they flow. Ex: You're not a liar You're the paragon of truth. I don't know, that was just off the top of my head. Think about it though. Try to make the poem flow and have meanign and heart.