|Reviews for When You Own the Universe|
| Jess chapter 14 . 1/31
I love Jonah's pov...hope theres a lot of it in the future!
| Jess chapter 12 . 1/31
Im in love with this story.
| loivissa17 chapter 26 . 1/12
after reading this whole story, i have one word for you. Beautiful.
| Guest chapter 26 . 12/18/2013
I really do hope you're a published author now.
| Lexi chapter 26 . 12/7/2013
Same person as reviewer #3,602. I am also hoping you put a sequel up yourself. And yes, I did read the author's note.
| Lexi chapter 26 . 12/7/2013
Hi, um, Secretive. I got inspired by this story, so I wrote my own sort of sequel. If you want place a comment here with your email, and I'll send it to you. Maybe you could even put it here, on FictionPress? So, uh, yeah.
| Kylie chapter 26 . 12/7/2013
NONONONONONONONO! Please do a sequel, please! I already fell in love with Jonah, Remembrance, Remington, Elliot, and Chris! Heck, even Alicia. Please. PLEEEEEEAAAAAASEEEEEEE!
| xQu3eN4tHeDaYx chapter 26 . 11/26/2013
My fucking god. This story was so goddamn amazing I am in love with it! It made me cry like legit in tears and I never cry like ever. This was so fucking amazing! It gives me the shivers just how much I am in love with this story :) You are so talented! Amazing! Really oh my glob! I am in love like seriously! You must never stop writing! This was one of the greatest stories I've read and I've read soo many! Oh shit you are like my new fav. author! I loved this so much :3 -Matty
| FreekyDisaster18 chapter 1 . 11/21/2013
Hey! I'm here to share some news with you. This story was added to the Geek and Hot Guy category over on A Drop of Romeo!
Here's the Review:
"Helen Thinks: “When You Own the Universe” by Secretive is the story of Remembrance “Mem” Pierce and she has just been bought in a school auction by her worst enemy; Jonah Mills. However, because of their hatred, the pair of them often share arguments that end in insults but this one time they had a bet - whoever knew about more than the other was the winner and the loser was to leave the boarding school where they lived. Mem thinks she has this in the bag because Jonah is a shallow, spoilt rich kid, right? Wrong.
The pure delight in this story was that the characters; even though they can seem almost whiny and pathetic at times; were really padded out and had realistic flaws that you could imagine the rich kids having. The characters names are unique and quirky - hello, Remembrance has a twin called Remington. Can you say amazing? - which is just one of the traits that makes this story stand out to so many that have loved it.
The story bounces between points of views which could be viewed as annoying if not done correctly but I think Secretive had the perfect balance between all the characters. There was no seeing the same moment over and over again in each viewpoint, Secretive smoothly used the new viewpoint as a transition into the next scene which made it flawless.
My one downfall of this story is that it starts with an auction where Jonah buys Mem and nothing much happens with that, nor does much happen of their bet apart from the odd mention of the odd fact about a favourite. However, in the end when Mem does learn that there is more to Jonah than meets the eye, I believe Secretive makes up for the lack of fluidity with their plot.
Despite this, I believe that “When You Own the Universe” is a unique, funny little story that really stands out in the crowd. We may not own the universe as readers but we definitely own the time to read this fantastic piece of fiction."
| Nami98 chapter 26 . 11/18/2013
This was absolutely amazing! I regret nothing (just spent hours reading this) they have the cutest relationship x3
| Guest chapter 26 . 11/17/2013
| Aria chapter 26 . 10/26/2013
I honestly don't think I've ever had that many mood swings while reading a story. I may just make an account on here so I can favorite this story.
| Squidshy chapter 26 . 10/9/2013
I GAVE YOU 5 OUT OF 5 STARS. I FOUND ANOTHER GREAT STORY. YAY. Anyways, I think you should change the genre to drama and hurt/comfort instead of drama and humor. Because instead of laughing too much, I happen cried A LOT in every single chapters. Man, I love a sappy angsty story that you might call me a masochist or whatever is that because I love the pain that I feel whenever I read a story, and you're successfully torturing me with that pain and I love how it feels.
And btw, I love the epilogue especially this convo:
"Already planning their births?"
"Depends on how long you're going to fight to stay with me." She whispered in return of my question.
"I'll fight for you, always."
ADFGJSKHBNKKDIOOUGWUUIFJJDJJCK MAN. I. LOVE. JONAH. SO MUCH. I SWEAR TO GOD.
I WANT A GUY LIKE HIM IN MY LIFE. CRYING.
Okay, sorry for my fangirl inner. It'll be out after I read such a beautiful story just like this story of yours. And to be honest why I like the story is because all the characters were having the same issues as me. The family issues. The needed of having someone to share your feelings, to care about, and to be loved and wanted. No one wants me, sadly. I'm 15 years old and I never knew how it feels like to have a boyfriend and to be loved and wanted. I have family, but since my parents divorced, we're fucked up. My sisters went wild, I lost contact with my father, my mother's becoming an atheist well I actually didn't her religion. She's half Muslim and half Christian, so I coinsidered her as an atheist (God, forgive me) Okay, enough with my life story. Well, the difference about your characters and me is that I sometimes opened up with my friend. Okay, I don't have bestfriend. Too bad.
Uhm, and hey do you have twitter or facebook? Or maybe email? I'd like to get to know you more! Is it okay if I wanted to be your friend?
Anyways, sorry for my grammatical errors. English isn't my native language neither do it's my mother's language.
Least but not last, I put your story to my favorite story list.
| monkeyyy chapter 26 . 10/8/2013
I will admit, I gradually grew to love this... now I want more... iunno but like... imagining him all sheepish with his accent UUGH *can't taek it*
| Guest chapter 7 . 9/26/2013
I like that you find time to reply to every single persons reviews.