|Reviews for When You Own the Universe|
| Elynwe chapter 26 . 5/27
I started this story not understanding why it had so many review and favorite. Thinking "Oh, people only like obvious and crappy story". And well there was a little something that made me keep reading. And then I couldn't stop reading. In your comments you said at the beginning "I hope you'll like Jonah" and I remember that I LAUGHED thinking "There's no way you manage to do that", and next thing I know I was crying for Jonah when he meet his mother and insulting Remembrance for being so selfish. I actually hoped that Remembrance would have evolved more, but it still is a beautiful story. And for having a depressive good friend, I truly felt Jonah and Remmy fight (the one where Jonah's Irish accent came out), it really is incredibly written.
Also, I laughed a lot at your comments about computers and internet. I was 4 yo in 2003, and I remember our enormous computer, big enough for our cat to sleep on top of it haha
Well, I don't even know if you still receive reviews or not, so maybe writing all of this is pointless (sounding a bit crazy like Elliot here lol), but truly thank you for writing and sharing this story with us.
Have a nice day/week/ life ~
| Polished Gem chapter 26 . 5/21
I’m going to start with the criticisms because I’m going to end on a positive note. Please don’t get discouraged. Initially, I felt the book was poorly written. There were tons of typos in the first few chapters and distracting Run on sentences. The dialogue was all clumped together and sometimes it was hard to decipher who was saying which part. Some parts of Remington’s mental ramblings didn’t convince me that he was a guy. He thought like a girl pretending to be a guy. But as I continued to read, I fell in love with this story. The emotions are so raw, real and strong. You feel their pain, concern, happiness, and nervousness with the whole depth of your body. You conveyed that beautifully. I’m glad I looked at the review count and decided to keep reading because I was impressed. This truly was a masterpiece.
| Guest chapter 26 . 4/11/2018
What a cute and wonderful story! I really enjoyed it from top to bottom.
| Ciaran Blare chapter 26 . 3/14/2018
I really enjoyed reading this story thank you (even if I only got 3 hours of sleep because I couldn't stop reading)
| Lightning31415 chapter 4 . 8/2/2017
Oh good God...
Half of this chapter is part of your Author's Notes and responses to your fans. That is excessive.
Please make it stop...
| Hello it's me chapter 25 . 7/15/2017
I enjoyed this story. I was tired but I stayed up to read this.
| Hello it's me chapter 1 . 7/15/2017
Fantastic start. I love it!
| MayWillow chapter 26 . 2/27/2017
Ok so I've my mid terms coming up but I couldn't study at all because I fell so much in love with the male lead that I couldn't stop myself. I mean Jonah...JONAH! He's amazing and I loved loved loved him! And I felt so bad for him and just wished so much that I could comfort him. Sorry to say but I around chapter 15 to 20 I hated the Pierce twins on how self-absorbed they were. Remembrance was annoyingly demanding and even Remington disappointed me so much. Loved Chris xoxox
Overall, the plot was great. Nice development of characters and deliverance of thoughts and words but...there were points where the story was a bit weird and random and abrupt. And we are still left wondering about what happened to Jonah's father and if his mother ever tried to contact him again.
Anyway...I cried a lot for Jonah. He was beautiful.
| harshakuniyil chapter 26 . 2/24/2017
The most Amazing story on fictionpress
| Bahati chapter 11 . 12/18/2016
He just lost the bet
| Amordeyn chapter 19 . 7/12/2016
I really tried to stop myself from crying over the past couple of chapters, but this one made me burst into tears. But it was awesome. The story, I mean.
| dheepi chapter 26 . 4/26/2016
I just luvd readng dis story.. Njyd a lot... (:
| YungMoolah chapter 26 . 1/29/2016
Brilliant story. Absolutely loved all of it :D Its a shame that the epilogue wasn't longer ahahah
| Guest chapter 26 . 11/29/2015
I LOVE THIS STORY SO MUCH I'M GONNA CRY
| BonnesParoles chapter 26 . 9/8/2015
Hi! I NEVER review stories, but I felt the need to review this. Okay, that's a lie. I've probably read 1000 stories on this and have only reviewed 3. BUT I loved this story and to be honest, I almost gave up on it. I don't know. Somewhere around Chapter 8, I wasn't feeling it, but I'm glad I stuck with it. ALSO, it took me until the last chapter to realize that Jonah's favorite movie is Sleepless in Seattle and that Tom Hanks's character's son is named Jonah! When I realized that, my mind was blown. Anyway, great story!