Reviews for When You Own the Universe |
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![]() ![]() ![]() I LOVE IT! THIS STORY IS SOOOOOOOO ADORABLE! ahahaa sry 4 the scremy fangirl moment, but I rly love this story. Great plot, crazy drama and sweet romance. U sure a have a knack for good writing. Keep it up! :) |
![]() ![]() ![]() Love the story! It's really good and the grammar and spelling is great as well. I really like the plot of the story. |
![]() ![]() ![]() I love Jonah he just sounds absolutely misunderstood and lovable I feel that I could just lie down and snuggle with him. And then the brother Remi I think he sounds smexxi I love hot prep school guys and this is just the story that expresses this it sounds like its going to be awsome! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Do you know what's awesome? When none of the characters in a story is two-dimensional. Seriously, how did you do that? I could almost relate to even Remembrance's mother. Usually, when one of the main characters is really messed up (Jonah), the other one serves just as a sort of "fixer" figure. It was interesting that both of them had troubles, and that the "fixer" was constantly shifted. Other stuff I really liked was the way their relationship was paced (it actually made sense), Alicia's character, how Remmy's Secret Admirer scolded him in a way a good friend would, rather than being all fangirlish, and just Remmy in general. I mean, his character is what the female lead usually is, but you really made him work as a tritagonist. I'm not sure if you'll know what I mean. I kept waiting for Derek to make an appearance. He was trying to buy her, so I was pretty sure that he would approach her at some moment. And that Brenda girl, tough not as much because her and Remembrance seemed to have just grown apart, not have some huge fallout or anything. I guess Derek's role was more than anything increasing Mem's insecurities anyway, and that it's always better to leave some things unresolved. (On an unrelated topic, Yellow is my absolute favourite song as well! Anything by them, really. I'm particularly fond of that line "For you I'd bleed myself dry", which I hope doesn't make me sound sadomasochistic or something, because I'm not. Really.) |
![]() ![]() ![]() I dont know how long it took u to write this story, but i noticed that ur writing matured really well over the chapters! Very nice! I love your story :) |
![]() ![]() ![]() I absolutely love this story. It's beautiful and quirky and made me cry. Keep up the great work. |
![]() ![]() Hey Loved your story. Completely loved Jonah and as morbid as i sound i love his pain. They way you expressed his depression is amazing i loved it and cried when he cried and even when he didn't cry i cried in his place! You know who else i also love? CHRIS! I really can't wait for you to write his own story! |
![]() ![]() ![]() I've absolutely LOVED reading this story! I loved the way you made us feel what the characters were feeling, how you made the characters seeem REAL. It was really refreshing to find an author who didn't feel the need to curse every other word. Thank you so much! You just made my day. I can't wait to read your other stories! |
![]() ![]() ![]() I'm pretty sure this is the third of fourth time I've read this story. Of all my favorites on this site, this is definitely up there on top 5. Maybe even top 2, but I'll never tell if this one won the first or second position. :) Jonah is one of my favorite guy characters too. I loved that he had an emotional and vulnerable side to him. My heart breaks for him every time I read about his terrible father and mother abandoning him. And typically I'm not a big fan of the main female character (I'm not really sure, but they always have annoying qualities about them that irritate me to no end) but Rememberance is do great! But yeah, I just figured I'd inform you of how much I love love love this story. And that Yellow by Coldplay is my favorite song (and that I didn't know of a bluegrass version to that song. Apparently I have discovered my next Google search). Anywho, I'll stop rambling before I continue forever. Love the story! Sam ) |
![]() ![]() ![]() THIS. this story, man, is one of my favorite ever! The sketchbook was sooooo cute and just everything about it. I loved how you allowed each character to develope in his or her own sense. Chris is an interesting character but there's just something abuot him that you gotta like. Jonah was deeper than I expected and I love him and Mem. I also am in loooove with Remmy, and how he's so sweet, but proctetive of Mem. Overall, this is one heck of a story and I love it. I really do. Thanks (: |
![]() ![]() ![]() I love Jonah! It had to be said. And furthermore I am girl enough to admit that the sketchbook made me tear up a little (and I NEVER cry. Feel proud, feel very proud). Your writing is great, the perfect blend of humour and angst, enough so that you're riding a rollercoaster of emotions along with the characters, but not to the point where you feel like throwing yourself off in the darker scenes (hugging Jonah and never letting go? Now that's another matter entirely. Purely for the purpose of...comfort. Of course). Basically I adored every chapter |
![]() ![]() ![]() Haha, I LOVED the ending! So funny, actually I loved the whole book. I'm gonna ahead straight over to your profile and read some more of your stories! Thanks for writing this! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Really good story! You did an excellent job with the ending. Perfect mix of lovey dovey and real life bickering. Way to stay true to the characters because after ten years of going at eachother I don't think they would absolutely break that habit. Good job! |
![]() ![]() ![]() I loved this story :D or I just really like mysterious boys with a mysterious past ;) hehe, anyway great job! |
![]() ![]() ![]() I absolutely loved this story! :) I enjoyed how the relationship progressed at a natural pace (some try to rush the hate out :/). I love how I fell for Jonah's character. I adore how he couldn't say the right things, but rather how he could put all the right things together. It was all wonderful, it may be the rather weird romantic in me, but I wish I could have a relationship like that. :P Ah, well, time to wrap this up cause not many like my rambling. -Shadow Kissed |