Reviews for When You Own the Universe
JazzeeT chapter 1 . 10/17/2003
hey another story. i really like this
Slideshow chapter 1 . 10/17/2003
What do we think? Should you continue? Honey, are you NUTS? Of course you should continue! That was a great piece of work. Aw I like it already. Your writing is great too. I'm going to check out your other story soon ), cuz it sounds just as good. See ya and update!


BTW, lol a labret pierce is the chin thingy. You know, right under the lip? And dont feel stupid, because I didnt know what it was until a little before I started to story. My best friend didnt know what it was either hahha.
peanutilover chapter 1 . 10/17/2003
what's he want her for? hm.. keep updating, or i shall be forced to come after you wih salad tongs!
wolvie chapter 1 . 10/17/2003
that was good, i'd like to read more so please continue!
Clare chapter 1 . 10/17/2003
omg! that was really good and it was only the first chapter! I can't wait until you post the next chapter!
fabulous faery chapter 1 . 10/17/2003
CONTINUE! its great please keep going!
ck chapter 1 . 10/17/2003
Continue with this story. I like it. I can't wait until you update. Plese update quickly to. Thanks. I can't wait.
Cooties chapter 1 . 10/16/2003
LOL, sounds really funny! I really like it so far! Update soon!
warnthepenguins chapter 1 . 10/16/2003
Crazy. REALLY good initial setup. The reader's dropped into this going "What the hey?" because of the references to slavery and...stuff. When it's revealed to be a more realistic premise, we're still interested. I hope that your story's going to touch on (maybe) the _reason_ that this rich school'd stage such a blatantly exploitative event.

I think there're a few sentences that are missing words, but other than that, excellent start.
Bomb in the Garden chapter 1 . 10/16/2003
Wow, what a great beginning! You have to continue this otherwise I will be very upset ;P

I love the character's names - they're awesome! Update soon plz!
BuffLie chapter 1 . 10/16/2003
Ahahah, what a cute idea.

I like the name Remembrance, very original.

And.. one lil thing (besides the occasional spelling error)...

((Four hundred bucks? What exactly did they think I was going to do?

“Eight hundred going once….eight hundred going twice….sold for eight hundred dollars!”))

First it was 400, then 800... I think you meant 400 both times? Yeah. I dunno. This one sounds fun :) So, yes, continue.
IrishVampire13 chapter 1 . 10/16/2003
Looks pretty good, thus far; I'm officially curious. I think you should really update this; it could be a lot of fun!
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