Reviews for Lies? im not sure about that
whatsapenname chapter 1 . 2/3/2004
i like it a lot. the if only if only part is good but id change in this i could believe to like "id left you sooner" or something. if you do, you should make another stanza to sort of wrap it up. like
"but i didnt, i didnt
and now youre still here"
whatever. thnx for reviewing for my poems and about dog tag, he was homeless BECAUSE he drank thats how his family left him too.
-whatsa-
Punky Monkey chapter 1 . 10/23/2003
Yay. Its another one in the structure i really like :D And i really like the way u repeated the word! Good poem :D
swirlygirl chapter 1 . 10/19/2003
trying to convince your self is the hardest part and i think this poem is great no need to add more!
Unchained Soul chapter 1 . 10/18/2003
I think then ending's really good and you should leave it as it is. IT's kinda hard to read and it doesn't flow very well when you put 2 words together like that, maybe consider changing that. Really good message.
PainKiller chapter 1 . 10/18/2003
The repetition worked so incredibly well throughout this to emphasize your point. The "Hate, Hate" and the "Love, Love" stanzas were my favs.
Ian chapter 1 . 10/17/2003
I like the format. I also like the poem, great job once again