i dunno what it is, but this is a beautiful piece. mysterious, flowing words, i like this a lot. full of emotion and sweet. looking at other's reviews, coma seems like a good answer. having the will to come out of that voic state of mind, come back to this world. great job on this. keep up the awesome work! and i will read your stories when i have more time. _

Dang, I love your poetry. It's just so cool. I can't believe that you took down Ice Tears. But actually, I don't really blame you. It was probly one of the best poems that I have ever read. I'd like it if you'd post a couple more poems.
May your onions stay sweet,
-Eckrice

The imagery in this poem is GREAT; the rhyming sometimes feels a little forced, though. But you've obviously got a lot of talent. - Kishana

Pretty! I like the rhyming. I'd venture a guess towards it, but I already looked at the Reviews..._
Lol, anyway, I like it!
~winged one~

Hm...is it a coma? Great poem, with wonderful images and wonderful rhyming. Some rhyming is very cliched, but not yours. I couldn't find any errors (no surprise there) GEEZ, you are GOOD.

Merman: YES! VERY GOOD!

*shakes head* Hopefully you'll read the review where I explain him...

Merman: EXPLAIN ME? WHY?

argh...

Cool - this is a great poem! I loved the last stanza, it really gave a nice ending beat to the piece. Beautifuly done - I must say, I'm impressed.

Tenika Dargan

I don't know what it is, but this was awesome anyways. Great job on the rhyming and flow... I really like this! "I am the beat of my rhythmic heart," -I love this line. Keep writing :)

Oh yes, it is most definitely referring to birth. *hands Braduil a metaphorical cookie*

No, seriously, I always wonder how long it will take people to figure it out. Some do really quickly, and some never do. Heh. I guess that means it serves its purpose. I just like this one because it's one of my few poems that I've managed to write without making up a tune to it. It's so much harder to write things when you have to make up a tune as well.

Thanks for reviewing. :)

Nice poem. If I had to guess, I'd say it was refering to birth.

i give up.. what are you? cool poem though. i like the rhythming. *TI*