Very nicely done. Also very original. I haven't read anything like this. Or maybe it's just me? Anyway, you have to continue this real quickly! I'll be waiting.

YAY! Girl Power!

I must admit, i'm a sucker for strong females against a male-dominated world. I love those characters, especially when they're warriors. have I been getting too much animé recently? yes. women are strong. don't ask. let's not "digress" too much*coughcough* [popular word these days, isn't it?] in my opinion, this story has so much potential, especially with the world and characters you have created. -i love your characters!-

Ch1: scentsent

I agree with Andrea, you wouldn't go back and change your few grammatical errors, even after it was brought to your attention, but you could send it to one of us and we'd change it /for/ you. You're right, this story is so different from your usual style. I like it! Your names are surely fitting, though I'm pretty sure 'Fenris' was the name of a fearsome wolf, the son of the god Loki. Is Bryony truly the name of a plant? You always were one for the names.

forever yours, jessc

I like it! I recognized Lupe as a wolf-related name. I don't see any problems here... Oh, and please R and R my story, The Fairy War! (Sadly, I'm not the only one with that -title-... Yar)

Getting better and better. I especially liked the tawny and fawn fangs, (hehehehe).

Your writing style is really good and the story is made believable. keep up the great work and PLEASE post again soon as I REALLY want to know wht happens!

Very original and interesting idea for a story. But such ideas spark curiosity, and for this reason you may want to go a bit more in depth with your writing. The others gave good suggestions. I'll be keeping track of this story for sure.

I like it! Please update soon!

Well, let me just say that this thing DEFINITELY has the potential to be something unique and wonderful. Please, longer chapters though!

great begining! sounds like the start of a great book! elaborate more on the tribe's history... what EXACTLY they did... create a language or style of speech for them, they seem to b from another world or times. are they proud, or slobs. or do they speak like everyone else. explain more why a girl was a problem. im sorry im writing your book for you! i just wish i thought of the idea! go on with the writing... i want to see a best seller!

I love it! And I really really hope you continue!

wow, this looks like it will be totally awesome. its an interesting society youve developed, and i love their reactions to a girl. keep it up!

Firstly, I love the name Bryony, its always been a fave of mine. Secondly, I love wolfs, always been a fave of mine. Thirdly, I LOVE THIS STORY!

It really well written so far and you describe everything really well, the tribe etc. Keep up the excellent work.) This one is defiantly going on my fave stories list!

Also, If you have some time could you please review my first novel, the battle of tierre and give me some tips? )

From a newly devoted reader: tawnyfawn