What a shame on Cathleen. Waiting to see how she's going to respond to the news.

Can I just offer a suggestion? You have three people talking in one paragraph (Mrs Blosson, Cathleen and Mr Gideon) I think it would be easier to read if you took a new paragraph/line when someone different speaks.

I love this story, please write more!

Ah... Come on then! What's going to happen? Need to know! So far, so good. Keep it coming.

this is a really good piece of work...are you going to add any more chpters? i can really see a story developing...please continue! and if you get the chance, please rr my work, too!

chloe

:( Aw. Poor girl.

You're a good writer, I'd like to read more :)