|Reviews for The Revolution|
| Iren Masot chapter 5 . 12/31/2003
YOU SAID THANKS FOR THE ADVICE, BUT WHERE'S tHE GuY W/THe MasK?
i just get a little touchy sometimes.
But really, where is the guy with the mask?
I'm so wierd, aren't I? *nudge nudge*
| Iren Masot chapter 4 . 12/19/2003
Your having a problem that you could probably fix w/the narrator. The best thing I think you could do is approach your writer's block head-on. Just sit down and basically "ad-lib" something on your computer and see if you like it. (Include the narrator)
| Snowtiger chapter 4 . 12/1/2003
Nice story, all in all. I had to read all the chapters on one sit. Reminds me of the series "Dark Angel", which had a similar theme in it. :)
I hope you get over your writer's block soon to continue the story. I'd like to read more of it as soon as its possible.
| mnemonexus chapter 4 . 12/1/2003
*gets mad at christmas for being so far away*
| DragonLady of Avalon chapter 3 . 11/23/2003
| mnemonexus chapter 3 . 11/14/2003
we humans really need something else to be prejudiced against, otherwise we start fighting amongst ourselves.
too bad it's that way though...
| scrapbooker chapter 3 . 11/4/2003
short but interesting. Keep up the good work. I would however like to see chapters that are a little bit longer, even just a tad.
| scrapbooker chapter 2 . 11/4/2003
Fantastic story. I especially like the way you are showing the side of human nature that they struggle so hard to hide from others. The way we as a culture judge those who are different than us in any way, but mostly physical.
Can't wait to see how you develope this story.
| ionlyliveindreams chapter 2 . 10/29/2003
Ah, much better chapter :) I loved this: "Naturally Challenged" hehe, that's great, it made me laugh, but I can see them saying that. Anyways, good chapter I like it and I look forward to more :)
| ionlyliveindreams chapter 1 . 10/24/2003
Hm, good start, I like it so far. I didn't really see any problems, but I'm not really in the mood to look. Actually, I guess your telling not showing, which is the first rule that is hard not to break, but one of the most important, but I know how hard it is and if you do it just for the first chapter it'll be OK. It's almost like the first chapter is a journal entry or whatever, and I've done that with one of my stories, so no worries, but just don't do that for every chapter. Anyways, I like it so far, please continue!
| mnemonexus chapter 1 . 10/24/2003
| ZaphodChick chapter 1 . 10/24/2003
That's really good! Keep up the good work!