Reviews for Unfinished Business
Lil Yuy chapter 1 . 10/26/2003
That was a great new story!

I like how you ended the it a big cliffhanger thingy...

I also liked how you gave the story a twist, which made it really entertaining...

Anyways...Good was a kewl story _
Kawaii-Turtle chapter 1 . 10/25/2003
Haha! I love the ending and how she rambled on and on about stuff, not think he could hear her. XD Poor girl, probably gonna die (again!) of embarrassment!

I'm going to be paranoid about walking under buildings now...x_x Update soon! And don't give up on False Facades! (No telling how many people will tell you that P)
DreamNightmare chapter 1 . 10/25/2003
this is a great story idea! i love it! srry i didnt read it earlier...was in trouble las nite heh...update soon n dont give up on ur other story! ill b really sad if so! :(

chihou chapter 1 . 10/25/2003
Cool Story! D
Jony chapter 1 . 10/25/2003
Wow! I've been waiting to read the next chapter of "False Facades", so I decided to browse and see if you had any more stories up. To my surprise, I found this one, and, wow! I hope you get it done quickly, cause it's uber awesome, and I already love it!
Ayakaishi Fei chapter 1 . 10/24/2003
Wow... this is a really interesting start - and a really interesting idea. I like it - alot! Anyway, I hope you continue, cos this is really good, ver interesting, and very well written - great job!
Winne chapter 1 . 10/24/2003
Wonderful! Pure genious...i laughed really hard at the end. What a perfect response...please UPDATE SOON!
You Need More Flair chapter 1 . 10/24/2003
When I read the first paragraph or so, I was horrified! I 'd thought you'd gone from excellent stories such as False Facades, to melodramatic stories...

Boy was I wrong.

This is great! It was quite hilarious at the end...

Keep on writing, and hurry on up with the updates...
Chandramukhi Patel chapter 1 . 10/24/2003
hey, that was a good story. I agree that it seems odd that a young guy has a career that would need so much experience. But good, over all, I enjoyed it.
Prosperina chapter 1 . 10/24/2003
A very interesting first chapter; two minutes into the story and there's already a twist! Yep, that's the way to keep readers wanting more. I like the satirizing of the news reporter and all the people who collectively gasped. I can't quite imagine a young guy being an exorcist though, I mean, what an aspiration! That sure beats being a policeman. There were some grammatical errors that I caught, but they were sparse. Extensive vocabulary, but not riduculously peppered with a string of unpronounceable words when "and" would do. On the whole, an entertaining start. I look forward to reading more!
ck chapter 1 . 10/24/2003
Oh, my gosh. That was funny. I can't wait to see what happens next. I wonder what she is going to do next. Please update soon. Thanks.
Chelsea Plum chapter 1 . 10/24/2003
I LOVE THIS STORY! IT'S GREAT! i really like the storyline too...and're a great writer! i love this story!


Lyra Torg chapter 1 . 10/24/2003
Nice chapter. I was wondering why it's rated G though...
AlienVision chapter 1 . 10/24/2003
OMG! u gotta update now! i mean, this is a great beginnig for a great story...update now! i luv this...
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