Reviews for Cut |
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![]() ![]() ![]() Its a good start! I enjoyed reading it. My ownly problem with it is the lines "You can't get any crazier. just do it. It helps.". Most cutters don't need to convince themselves that cutting helps. It seems like your looking too much from your own point of view. Put yourself in her spot, she most likely thinks differently. Good overall! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Jeez. . . . well, I can honestly say you've done an awesome job of describing how it feels to quit cutting. . keep up the good work! |
![]() ![]() ![]() hey...its me... CiCi! i had to get a new account b/c for some reason my old one wasnt working damn it. lol. ne who im here to give you my comments on your story as i do on any other story that i read. well, this story is very insightful and very deep in meaning. im going to read your other chapters and see what other things you have to teach me. thanx for letting me read your work, you're a very talented writer. love always, ~CiCi~ |
![]() ![]() awesome story! cutting really is that addicting and you captured it perfectly, please continue. my best regards to your friend. |
![]() ![]() ![]() nicely written. good. I WANT MORE! okay thank you. good characters too |
![]() ![]() ![]() im reading, chapter one "cold turkey" and im aredly hooked.. i love how you present Bo' is really nice |
![]() ![]() ![]() i can relate to the girl stopping cutting...then starting again. keep up the good work |
![]() ![]() ![]() Hi! Okay, I just started reading your story and I have a few comments. I think that you really need to work on drawing things out a bit, I guess. Obviously, you can't do that TOO much, as it's based on a real story, but to completely skip an entire year and just write a note saying "Oh, yeah, it's next year..." doesn't really...work well. What I would suggest doing is writing that INTO the story, for example "The new school year began...(blahblah)" - just a little sentence or two actually IN the story. You should also explain who the characters are in the story, rather than just an author's note. Especially Bo's internet friends. And (last thing :D) when she (or anyone, really) is thinking something, you can just put it in regular "quotation marks" because right after her thoughts, you say "she thought" or something like that... Anyway! Other than those few little things, you are a very good writer and I can't wait to read more from you! |
![]() ![]() ![]() It's a good story, and fairly well written, but I think you could add in more details to explain things like how she knows people. Details help the reader relate to whats going on, and I know its hard to write about it with details, because it might be hard for your friend to tell you and whatnot, but details could make this story so much better. Great job so far, and keep writing! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Good chapter. Nice to know that Lestat is there to talk her out of it. Keep writing please. |
![]() ![]() ![]() personally, i'm surprised she has a boyfriend in the first place in my school that's like a mark of how rich you are...wow... |
![]() ![]() ![]() This is very well written. I think you did a good job writing about such a touchy subject. I also like the way you made the knife have a personality of it's own when it was taunting her, and like a hungry animal after her blood. I'd like to read more. |
![]() ![]() ![]() I really like your story, you're good with details. Keep up the good work. I hope you review soon. |