Dude. That. Rocks. Especially liked " Never. Piss. Me. Off."

Possibly an interesting story concept, but not presented very well...

I realize that this is a short story and that that leaves less room to draw out a plot complication and develop it more fully... However, even for a short story, this is too rushed, especially the ending.

Treat this story as the "outline" for something longer and more detailed, and see what you can come up with.