This was really neat. I liked the emotion that was etched into this. Great job, and keep it up.
~Lidless Eye

Very beautiful and full of passion.
Your style of writing is truly great and holds a lot of emotion. I love the way the words flow and capture the reader's attention. Great job. Keep it up.

Another poem about death, everyone writes them, but nobody uses original imagry. You should try to use some fresh new distinct images.

Wow, gives you an eery kind of feeling. The structure of the poem was perfect, and the grammer was perfect, along with the detailed descriptions. "Kick me like a child, and let me hold your hand

I don’t wanna hear the screams of a muted, broken man" uh wow!Can I just say those are the most powerful lines of the poem, great imagination. Keep up the good work.

*Jenna*

whoa.

the power of this poem is really reverbrating in my brain even now, such strong words and examples, you really painted the picture with a perfect mix of sadness, pain, and anger.

i always really hate trying to find a favourite line in your works because they are all just so god damn good!

hm...

"I don’t wanna hear the screams of a muted, broken man" so many meanings i could put to that line, every single one is as cryptic as the next.

"Burn brightly in my iris and tear my throat apart" a horrific picture came into my head when i read that, an aimge of evil red glowing eyes...

"No-one listens when I cry or watches where I lay" so sad, very lonesome...the picture just brought to me a feeling of cold isolation.

"I’d already be in heaven as I re-wrote my mummy’s will" very marilyn manson - very clever.

"If I killed myself over, then I’d do this all again" gave me the chills.

great poem as always, very creative, the descriptions making it just come so .

Wow this is great. The imagery and everything is amazing...uh...I'm sorry I'd write a more articulate review but my brain is a little fried right now from overwork. Do you know anything about the "Self-reflexivity in Shakespeare's sonnets". No...oh well...maybe I'll write a paper on your poem. It really is great. I wish I had some more interesting input. Maybe I'll read some of your other work later on.