I really enjoyed reading this. You did a really nice job with the rhyme scheme and the near ryhmes are pretty cool. It really makes you think. This poem...Can I make a song out of it? I really really like this one!

Absolutly amazing. I love the last 4 lines. sure brilance. I envy they way you get your emotion into your poems and yet maintain a rhyme to it. Congrads on an excelent poem.

~Tenchi~