|Reviews for Silvana|
| Kezarahk chapter 1 . 11/4/2003
Not bad, but what it needs most is paragraph breaks. It's hard to read without them.
Quote marks would be good too, unless the quote-less style is deliberate. (Some people like it.)
Also, I'd like to see more details. If you flesh the story out more, let me know. )
Keep writing. )