|Reviews for The Mill|
| lucid-psyche chapter 1 . 12/10/2003
OW ... -shudders- That's awful, what happened.
Only major suggestion is that you space your paragraphs better - big blocks of text are scary. -shudders again-
- Nicole (aka lucid-psyche)
| faery tragedy chapter 1 . 11/8/2003
I'm a little confused about your genres. I mean, horror fits because of, well, the horrors of the mill. But parody? Are you just mocking how overdone death scenes are? Because if you are, add some oomph so paranoid people like me don't have to question your genre placement. :).
Nice story. It was short so that we couldn't really get to know the main character enought to make an opinion of her. The main point is the horrors of the mill. And that's that!
Didn't this sort of thing happen in the late 1800's, during the Industrial Revolution? Like, this girl got her hair stuck in a machine and it was pulled right from her scalp. *Shudders*.