|Reviews for The Shroud Of Betrayal|
| A Different Girl chapter 1 . 11/7/2003
Woah. That sucked. Sorry to say it, but it did. The plot was, um...pretty much nonexistent. The idea was pretty good, but the writing was terrible. There was no description, development, or character. No exposition, rising action, climax, falling action, or conclusion. Pretty much it was a bunch of words strung together coherently. My advice would be to take it down and totally rewrite it.