It reminds of of how I felt after my dad died, of depression. Twisted in a meaningful way. Loved it.

Um...what a nice little review box this is, you were right. Whoa, is that the time? Gotta go...um...WONDERFUL POEM! Now don't kill me *runs*

This has to be one of the best written poems I have ever read in a long time. You see, you described MY mind and MY thoughts when I was depressed almost to the letter. Did you write this from experience? I'd be cool if you did, because it's always nice to know you're not the only one tortured by demons. email please. You're a fantastic poet.

Hey! Dude, I get this. Seriously, it's disturbing but cool.

have you thought about seeing a counselor?

good story, I know what it's like feeling that way.

Lovely. Sounds like my life

i don't know y i like this, but i do!

Woah I can totally relate to that!

Mwahh! I love it! I totally get it-the sentiment actually reminds me of some stuff I've written-anyway, it's fabulous-just one suggestion-in the fifth stanza, it might read better if you changed 'off-alert' to 'unalert', but that's just a thought-but yeah, I totally love it! :) :) :)

*shudder* I feel like this... COOL!

i like it. umm i can't think of what else to say.

I didn't find your poem disturbing at all. Hmm, maybe that's because I'm twisted myself, I don't know. Anyway, just thought I should say nice job, it actually kind of reminded me of my some of my stuff, maybe I'll put some of it online sometime. Later.

I get it. Twisted things always amuse me.

i dont feel "dememnted" if that's whatyou wanted to know. I think it's very well written. And as far as being distrubed by it, i cant see where i would have been. also, i dont think strict-Xians would be thrown off by it. ::laughs:: You should some of the stuff I get away with... All in all, i'd like to see more of your work. Until! R. C. Carpenter