|Reviews for The Legacy|
| IHJ chapter 1 . 11/12/2003
Hm...Kinda gotta agree with Paganicewand here. It's a bit awkward, with that quite lengthy line.
Glad you wrote a poem for our former Prime Minister. I'm not really knowledgeable in politics and all, but does seem kinda weird to not have him as our P.M. anymore.
| justanotherdeadaccount chapter 1 . 11/8/2003
Yes I know...it's so sad he left the chair! What a great president he was...
I'm kinda scared for Malaysia now...but MALAYSIA BOLEH..right?
Maybe you should make your poems longer...instead of one stanza.
Where you wrote:
'In my heart, your words, your visions and your lessons,'
You should have broken it down to add effect:
'Are In my heart,
your words, your visions
and your lessons,'
Other than that...pretty good.