Reviews for Distortion
Jove chapter 1 . 12/16/2004
It's like a dream-dreamlike distortion. But it's much more...
Pulmonary Division chapter 1 . 12/31/2003
It's a great thing that you can write to sensuously and beautiful even when half asleep.
htmraw chapter 1 . 12/16/2003
Um... I don't know what to say...
I don't think I really understand it. Maybe thats a good thing?
HyacinthTwined chapter 1 . 11/14/2003
It makes sense but it'd be pointless to explain for I can't put it into words. It was well written. Dark and erotic.

~ Cp ~
a.reading.whore chapter 1 . 11/12/2003
Whoa...that's really cool. It makes sense when you first read it but then you have to ponder the meaning behind it and come up with...distortion. It's written in the language of the semiconsious. Whether I spelled that right or not, this is a very, very good poem.
Bitch Du Jour chapter 1 . 11/10/2003
This is wonderful. It's like...something that reminds me of something. I know that sounds confusing. But like, a remembrance of something familiar...you know? It's really wonderful.
Seeker of the Way chapter 1 . 11/9/2003
sounds like language of dreams. Lots of symbolic imagry!

I like the idea of that line "being introduced to bronze skin" (I am not sure why)

and: "Holes were perfectly bored "

It sounds like they were created, but also they are, you know,

don't have anything to do and so are bored.

"Frosty pink lips and teal undergarments wind around the wall of the cave "

teal - love the sound of that word.

teal. matched with undergarments really brings out the sound of both words.

teal undergarments.

wind around the wall of a cave - what could this mean?

sounds like a room is a cave.

A place of safety an dsecurity?

but also hidden from the world.

A place of mystery and sacredness.

The comfort of pillows smells hauntingly familiar

ah ...

we can recognize the smell of our pillows.

It is us, and it seems to smel ourselves

It is haunting, because you don't want to recognize yourself, but you do anyway

Sometimes it can give a haunting feeling when you feel your life around

As you get up or go to sleep.

Pillows are also soft, comforting.

cuddleable.