very good start to a complex story line. hope more is on the way.
I you could read some of mine a well id appreciate it. may I suggest the one
called "nice guy rejected again"

WHOTT!i really like it, but what all this bout him sneeking kissz hum...just as a not for further notice, maybe you should make the girl he picks a little less ovbious, and maybe make all the girls more even, like he really has to work hard to get an idea of what he wants... lol, oh well, it's really good!

Erm...I can't say you have gotten better...sorry...your story is just way to predictable...this sort of cliche story has happened numerous times and people want more (what's the word) exciting stories. I am not flaming you...just to remind...this is just connstructive criticizm (hahahaha look at me I can't even spell that word!). If you want more readers I suggest you start to tighten up the story. But keep on going!

i like dawne.. cool story update soon

o busted! i think he should learn to control himself. but i dont care if he doesnt. he's too adorable and way too much funn

update asap

Wow, great story! keep up the awesome job! update soon and please review my work! lataz, Kris

hey erm...this is getting better, just to point out something we know that Cameron is going to pick Dawne,

she is

Blonde

Pretty

Skinny

Well mannered

shy

and is obviously smart

both of the other girls are

dark haired

OK in looks

diffrent in weights

ill mannered

loud

erm...yes of course it's getting there, we already know that Cameron is going to pick Dawne it's very obvious, she's blonde, pretty, shy and well mannered, whilst the rest are dark haired and very ill-mannered...so far it's OK

hey...erm interesting start for a story... keep on writing we'll see where is goes from here, why dont you write on instead of ? just wondering, oh well i know how hard it is to take care of those horses though.

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