Reviews for Hollow Life
LeFlamel chapter 1 . 2/17/2011
nice piece. I like this poem in a way I can only vaguely express, so here goes. The rhyme scheme's functional, which for a concise piece makes it excellent. the distortion of time early on is a nice touch, "opening three minutes ago." then i find it confusing until the line about the sloth. from there on the emotional apathy works nicely with the repetition of "fine," and the ending of "succumbing to the beast inside." overall good rhyme, word choice, n themes