I like the imagry of this, and the references to finding yourself. I'd love to see this with a more firm rhyme scheme.

That was a good poem and it gave me some ideas for some of mine.
Thanks

hm...Mermaids? Have you been spending too much time with mary jane? Too much of mary jane aint good for you. you know?
I'm just kidding around.
I liked the poem alot. My favorite part was the last stanza. It is the most powerful part of the poem.
* And your review did make me smile. Thanks. It brightened up my day.

uhm deep? well the ones i've read all are...

i thought this was brilliant! It told the story so nicley and with a good structure. The end paragraph have lovly imagery and a great message. I have to say, this is one of my favourites (maybe because im obsessed with Disney's the little mermaid). great job!
Thanks for you review, i liked the comparrison of vampire and a rapist - very true. And its sad to know you were bullied because your a very talented writer. Its sad to know most people have been bullied, including me. Well ignore them because i think your work rocks!

Hm...I can kinda see this in my mind. (I've been watching the Animatrix.) Some cute parts, and the last stanza is definitely...MORE than the others. Great imagery there.

Izzy J.

I saw a mispelled word, but other than that, it was a really good poem. ) Mermaids enchant me. The last stanza was very imaginative. Good job.

Read some of mine? :)