Sorry to say but this sucks. And by suck, I don't mean your story but the way you set it up. It's really interesting and everything but after the third chapter, I simply couldn't take it anymore. The massive change in POV makes it impossible to tell who's talking and whose thought it is. Maybe if you write the name of the character on top it'll be easier. For now, I'm going to stop reading this unless it gets fixed. I really did enjoy it from what I read though and hope you continue writing. I would enjoy it even more if I got it in the format I wanted it.

ooh! I'll take songs/ poems and illustrations! My email is xoxo_asiameg . If you're still continuing those...

Ugg your illustrations link must have been censored... Yes, i'm probably too young for this, but I've read plenty, so who cares anymore? My parents don't care. I write them anyway. I'm mostly writing this review to praise your first chapter, but also so I will remember it later. I don't want to favorite you yet, as I haven't gotten a chance to read much. But I do like it. Can't wait to read the next chapter.

Good. I am wondering though about Akuma and Inoki though. Did he really put Akuma in the hospital or what? He didn't seem like he was really interested in humans. Anyway good chapter.

Ah, poor Inoki. Is he ever going to be happy? And Izuru being a judge, that surprised me, though I did kind of suspect he was a little evil. I'll be sure to continue reading._

Good so far. I got a feeling Izuru has an evil side.

UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE...this is a really good story... i just love it...you definitely should write more of everythings...your poems, songs and stories.*smiles*

LOL...that's funny...

that's new...anthony grabing at Izuru...you're first point of view jumping is confusing...try putting name tags before you change them...

what the hell...you're being purposely mysterious.

hm...change of perspective is confusing.

what in hell is happenin'?

Hey,

BWAH! This was so worth the long expanse of time that you spent on it Psy! Damn this was so wonderfully done, what with the lovely descriptions and the content and...and...So good! Now, for favorite parts, it would most definitly be the lemon, but now for what you think of course, but for the deep feelings that Monokai is expressing. This was very indepth, the emotions that he is feeling are sort of sad in a sense since Inokazi hates him (or so we think! :D) and the tears, oh the tears! That was depressing really :\ And since he knows that he loves Inokazi is even worse.

Still, that lemon was hot, hot, hot! :} It had morbid tendancies laced into it, what with the whole master/puppet thing, but it's also a little creepy that Inokazi can feel it Oo; But I loved it just the same!

Oh, I wish I could review longer, but all I can say is that it is fantastic and if you so much as stop for a while, I will beat you with a wrist watch! XD MUHAHAH! UPDATE! DO IT! NOW!

*K*D*

Wow... That last part with Inokazi was just... wow. Loved the chapter. But then, don't I always? The last part was my favorite. Obviously. Gah, I can't wait to see what happens next. It's just damned good!

Well, I hope you're able to fix the computer demon. Or at least beat the bastard into submission. Me? I had to buy a new hard drive. Mine bit it. Cha, sucked big ol' hairy monkey butt. Everything is going on disc or CD now!

Great chapter