|Reviews for Desert Lust|
| Asagao chapter 1 . 5/4/2004
Been a while, neh?
Your stuff is still amazing. I love your use of words and your meter is still impeccable. The meaning behind everything here is so intense, and I continue to keep you as a role model for prose and poetry. Love your stuff, you've only improved since last I contacted you.
Keep it up, never let your spirit die.
| Mike chapter 1 . 12/3/2003
I like the second verse, it's loaded and chilling.
| Aaron Mason chapter 1 . 11/27/2003
As usual, another excellent serving of song. Good use of the metaphor of the desert, without life, to explain how lifeless you feel when betrayed by the one you depend on most. (If I'm wrong, let me know - I need to brush up on my analysis techniques ;)
| fontanellemonster chapter 1 . 11/25/2003
Oh, that was very...powerful. I liked it a lot, the imagery was different from the type that a lot of people try to induce and it worked really well.
| Shattereddreams chapter 1 . 11/19/2003
Well you know I like it :P I still want my 'the' in there though damnit. Its all great although I'm not sure of the line 'consumed by bodily fatigue' I think its a bit wordy.
But you're ten times better than everyone else on here and you know it :P
| AngelWings3 chapter 1 . 11/19/2003
Nice job. I really like your stuff.