|Reviews for Belmont|
| BeyondAnywhere chapter 20 . 6/26/2008
Today I saw a tabby cat on my lawn. oh yes.
| DeathRealm chapter 34 . 12/31/2007
Wow. I always find it difficult to express how amazing a story is, when the very tale itself has left you void of words. Nevertheless I will make the utmost effort in an attempt to demonstrate how much I utterly adored this fiction. I'll start with favourite characters, just to give you an idea of how your audience is affected by the different characterisations within your story.
I read this last night, from start to finish. I'm not quite the insomniac, as I sleep whenever I want, I just have weird sleeping patterns. So it's natural that the story piqued my interest enough for me to stay up to 6am reading it. As I was progressing through the chapters I'd scan over your brief author notes and was quite surprised to see that Jehan wasn't an entirely popular character - he was my favourite!
And congratulations on Liv, I can't usually tolerate female protagonists as the way in which they are written often irks me, let alone reading about them in a close relationship with two of my favourite male characters. Somehow though, you made it work. I love the dynamics between Dayin and Jehan especially. I found it interesting the way when Dayin was himself he seemed more focused on Liv than he was Jehan, although when he switched to the persona of Night he was, to be frank, all over Jehan.
I felt sorry for him in a way because it seemed as though he only demonstrated his feelings for Jehan when he was Night, and I sensed a kind of protectiveness he had over him. So God help Neil if Night finds out that he is blackmailing Jehan.
You've probably figured out that those two are my favourite characters by now eh? I do like Tristan's character as well, there's more to him than his snobbish exterior and when it comes down to it he's one of these rich kids suppressed by their families' expectations. I was glad to see that he opened up as the story progressed though and began to mingle with the rest of 'em.
You've managed to develop a very diverse group of characters, and that is a really hard thing to do. As a single author you need to be able to understand different states of minds and have a good idea about the different people out there, some writers are unable to do that and thus end up writing a story with about 10 repetitive characters in it who speak in unity. Would I be making an inappropriate guess if I suggested that your DID helped you to understand different viewpoints easier?
I hate it when people seem to act and think together CONSTANTLY. But you successfully eliminated that problem by your variety of personalities, for instance Dayin and Adrien, those two were completely different and it just added more spice to the whole thing in my opinion, made it more realistic even. Your characters were also very humanised, meaning that the audience could relate better making the story more effective and gripping all around. I mean they had evident weaknesses that made them just as vulnerable as any of us.
I have to say though, Nora annoyed me. But you know that's not necessarily a bad thing. Not everyone gets along in real life do they? And you haven't at all made a mistake in the writing of her, because I'm sure there were some readers who liked her. And there is always a character who you have to despise, otherwise the story isn't interesting because quite plainly, you have no one to direct your anger towards. And come on, that's always fun.
I also love the idea of the whole boarding school/education theme. I recently started college and I'm very much the academic in the Sciences, including Maths so it's only natural that I relate to Jehan. And I'll most certainly think of them when I'm sitting in my examination room.
In fact I might even let him in my mind, adopt another persona so that when I'm dealing with some tricky sums, my imagination will let his personality take over and deal with the issues. That way you're not really alone in an exam at all, you have multiple characters in your head that you can sit and converse with if you so desire, I wonder if that would be considered cheating?
Seriously, you did a VERY good job with this story to leave a prolonged effect on me with your characters, and to even have me consider taking one on as another persona even. I really can't describe how much I enjoyed reading this.
I just hope I've managed to convey some of my appreciation within this short review, it really doesn't do it justice. I always try to make my feedback useful, and that often means pointing out points of negativity, though there weren't really many.
Despite English being your second language, you've actually written this a whole lot better than some people who possess it as their mother tongue, so no one really has the right to condemn you for any mistakes at all within your language.
An interesting thing I wanted to ask you though, I noticed it reoccurring as I read on. Why do you capitalise the word 'time'? I often place capitals in front of nouns accidentally, merely because you do that in the German language and I attended a language high school and thus has to study French and German, hence my confusion when it comes to nouns and word order. Anyway it wasn't really a problem, in an odd sort of way I think it personalised you more, you weren't just a name on my screen you know, some author I could just brush off upon revelling in their work.
I think the time you dedicated to your readers in your work was magnificent, it really demonstrated how appreciative you were of their time spent reviewing your story, and I think it takes a really good author to honestly respond to their readers in a such an informal manner.
Hmm, for advice I'd have to say you could try describing what your characters are doing when they are saying things. It was a tad confusing sometimes if there existed large chunks of dialogue and sometimes it was quite difficult to dissect them and work out who was talking when.
Apart from that, what can I really say to put down this piece of work? I have no words of disappointment, and I can only hope that you can regain the inspiration required to update this in the future, and that perhaps my review could provide some of that.
Thank you for providing us with a night of fictional fascination.
Für jetzt, alle der beste,
Von Dractonis Lance Madigan.
| Nicola chapter 34 . 6/27/2006
Okay, so I totally just read all 34 chapters in the past 3 days between my prom and graduation. & I absolutely adored it, then realized it is not completed and you havent updated in 6 months. Please, please update!
| Guest chapter 34 . 5/14/2006
| Slinkygirl chapter 34 . 4/25/2006
THE END OF THE YEAR WAS ALMOST FIVE MONTHS AGO; WHERE HAVE YOU BEEN?
wonderful chapter by the way. But you know what would make it even better?
having another chapter after it!
| InkPoisoning chapter 34 . 1/14/2006
Hey I finally got around to reading this chapter! God do I miss this story...keep it up or else *glares*.
| Call it nothing at all chapter 34 . 12/29/2005
Woohoo! A new chapter!
I wonder how many times I can say 'Poor Dayin, Poor Liv' before I burst. Then again, if it ended all nice and happily, I don't think I would have read this long. Yay, drama! :D
Also, not trying to be a deus ex machina, somebody needs to shoot Neil. :)
| Sky Inlucy chapter 34 . 12/29/2005
I am so behind it's depressing. :(
| freedman121 chapter 34 . 12/26/2005
This was good, although a bit short. More Jehan, PLEASE! I like him a lot :).
(I am the most amazing person you've ever met online.)
| Notdonewithlifeyet chapter 34 . 12/22/2005
Yeah, have found other people around me who like them also, now all we need is for them to tour the UK! Although am also going to see Deathcab for Cutie soon...Not as good but twill serve :)
A lovely chappie, welcome backx
| One Desire chapter 34 . 12/21/2005
Yay. Glad to have you back. Great comeback.
| ForeverWhimsy chapter 34 . 12/21/2005
Ah, an update. Sweet sweet relief.
I'm -loving- that it's finally getting to the point where we're figuring some things out.
Still not sure about the whole Neil spew.
| quiet-zone chapter 34 . 12/21/2005
Yay! I was so happy when i got the email that you had updated! Neil only popped in for a little bit... :-) Chapter was very nice!
| Tiff chapter 33 . 12/8/2005
Jules, it's Tiff. Okay, really, where are ya? 4 months, no Belmont! I hope you're well. Miss you!
| eug chapter 33 . 11/27/2005
sorry... guess it took longer to leave a message than i promised _ read from 30-33. needs more TRISTAN! he really needs to start stepping it up somehow.. :/ he always seems to not be present in these tough situations, but it'd be interesting to see what his reaction/actions would be. i like how you set up the whole situation with dayin and his step-sis.. was wondering when we'd see his character falter a bit. hopefully aure can shed some light in the next chapter? caden seems like a puppy compared to kayley, but i guess that's pretty obvious since he's not out to get back at anyone - hoping see his brighter side too! or a nora vs kayley chick fight? lol talk to you soon!