Reviews for One Leads To
Jo The Pirate chapter 1 . 9/15/2004
I really liked this one, it was beautiful in it's morbid, yet ever-flowing way. Once you get the ball rolling...
The one bad comment I have to make is that the last line doesn't have as much impact as it deserves, because death is repeated in such a way, it feels stamped out. Perhaps:
One suicidal/homicidal thought
Leads to death
or the other way around:
One death wish
Leads to suicide/homicide (I'm not sure which one you were aiming for, although I assume suicide.)
Beautiful poem, keep writing!