Reviews for One Leads To |
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![]() ![]() ![]() I really liked this one, it was beautiful in it's morbid, yet ever-flowing way. Once you get the ball rolling... The one bad comment I have to make is that the last line doesn't have as much impact as it deserves, because death is repeated in such a way, it feels stamped out. Perhaps: One suicidal/homicidal thought Leads to death or the other way around: One death wish Leads to suicide/homicide (I'm not sure which one you were aiming for, although I assume suicide.) Beautiful poem, keep writing! |