Reviews for She |
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Sakura Taking chapter 1 . 10/6/2006 This creates an interesting imagery. Well done with the overall flow as well. Keep it up! |
Azzalli chapter 1 . 6/26/2005 i enjoyed the imagery in this piece. the flow was very nice and kept me moving through the piece. nice job! i would like to read a lot more of you work. _ |
Ayunami Yori chapter 1 . 5/22/2005 i never get tired of Her. |
Matthew James Current chapter 1 . 4/13/2004 A superbly written piece. What some in upper circles would call great poetry. I would agree, as it harkens to something we can all relate to. For some it would be Hope, for others Faith, for others their Mother. Truly a wonderful piece, my favorite line being: "And her mind seems to dance with the sun, as a smile tickles her lips," Also, I enjoyed your line "'If only if only the world could see.'" Only three things I would change if I were you, not that the poem needs them. Easy mistakes to make theses, we all have at one point or another: "The nigh is her secret serenade." and "with the dieing of the world" One thing that threw me about this poem was how it was capitalized and punctuated, it seemed a little off to me, but that's just my opinion. It's your work and I TRULY enjoyed it. *adds to favorites* Thanks for the review and feel free to stop by my page and give my work a look anytime. Take care and please continue to write! |
Princess-anna57 chapter 1 . 4/12/2004 Beautiful. Absolutely gorgeous! I can relate to this piece! :)Keep up the good work! -Anna. |
darksiren1 chapter 1 . 4/3/2004 this reminds me of the young girl in the beginning of farienhiet (sorry about spelling) 451. very nice poem. |
Dahlia Wolffe chapter 1 . 1/14/2004 that was really good. really good. its sad, deep and well written. good job. please check me out sometime _angel |
Jocelyn Morrows chapter 1 . 12/10/2003 hey, here I am reviewing. I like this, it's not crap. I will definitely read some more, but right now I've got to go watch a movie with my roommies. God bless. |
It's Laura.I shall register soon P chapter 1 . 12/5/2003 *applauds* Very nice, my friend! I enjoyed it greatly. _ |
Just Wolf chapter 1 . 12/5/2003 i liked that! it was so confusing and intricate and funny. |
Shadafakup chapter 1 . 11/29/2003 Wow.. Angie is BACK! *huggles* Let me guess, is this about yourself? It sounds spiritual in a way.. It sounds really pretty and mysterious and it just makes me wanna get to know the 'she' in the poem.. The whole piece flows simply naturally, and it certainly is not choppy at all.. The structure and the breakdown of the phrases was well developed and the whole piece was well woven together.. Loved the repetition used here.. Adds emphasis to the poem, and gets the point easily across to the reader.. Honestly, this was brilliant and beautifully written.. I simply enjoyed it, I even read it a couple of times for good measure.. Great work here, you have to post more.. Well done babe! ~Shadafakup P.S. Thanks for the review! Lol, I added your name into one of my pieces because I randomly thought of you although I can't remember which one I placed it in.. Heh.. Anyway, I am so glad you're back.. Whee.. I missed you around here.. |
amanda chapter 1 . 11/27/2003 hi kitty! dude that was a gewd poem amanda hash liked it heehe |