Reviews for The Day
Susanita chapter 1 . 11/28/2003
This one made me smile widely (oh..the memories) Again, another very nice poem. Regular rhyme in most of the stanzas and has a lovely flow of words that seem to intertwin as the poem develops. I very much like it, 9/10 :)
TeenagePinoy chapter 1 . 11/28/2003
Ah, these times, I remember them well when I first asked a girl out,got rejected, died, and just moved on...
biggstrek chapter 1 . 11/28/2003
Poetry is not normally my thing, but I can relate to this way too much. Nice.
WarriorHeart chapter 1 . 11/28/2003
Good start with the topic and idea of what you were writing, but I think you could have written it with better rhymng words. It woulda made it flow nicer. Also, the ending was a bit melodramatic, try adding details to give it oomph.