I found myself easily slipping into this story. Good beginning to pull you in, good characters to want to know more about, and nice wording.
I won't bug you about your spelling since you admitted to being dyslexic, but it would be easier to read if you had more paragaraphs. I realise this may be FictionPress's fault. But, it would would make it a nicer read. I found myself starting to drift out of the story with the long unbroken paragraphs.
But, there is enough here to strike up my curiosity band, so do try to write more of it, thanks!