wonderful. I love the imagery of the chains shrieking. I think it would be better if you put the happy one first, the dark one second. maybe a childhood and an adulthood view? the changes within self and without in the park? _() just an idea.

Wow these 2 pieces are amazingly pretty. I love how you took one thing and gave 2 views of it. And they are seen as completely different. Awesome work!

Wow, definately much different than the previous poem! But, all the same absolutely wonderful! Keep writing!

Wow! That was so great! The images in my mind were so real... like somewhere I've been before. *shrugs* Anyways, that was excellent! Keep it up!

Thanks for reviewing. Wow I'm behind. That's an odd perspective on a playground. I never thought of it that way. Awesome.
*Seeing Starz*

this is kind of creepy. _