Reviews for A Perfect Game |
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![]() ![]() ![]() wow, I thought this story was fabulous! It took a long time to read, but I'm glad I made it through. Trent and Ally are so perfect for each other! well done! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Thanks for posting, I enjoyed the read :) |
![]() ![]() ![]() To be honest, I just decided to review so I could let you know how creepy I'm finding Leonard right now. While I can see how that can potentially be a bad thing for Ally; it's a testament to your writing skills. I originally thought he was just smitten with Ally, but after the whole reasoning behind hiring Leslie... I don't care how good an agent he is, I'd be running far, far away if I were Ally. You've done really, really well with the characterisation - a lot of stories that have multiple interests have a tendency to make them very similar in terms of personality and relies on physical description in order to emphasise the differences between the characters. Rock, Trent and Leonard all have their own distinct personalities and actually come across as three-dimensional, which is nice to see! I came across a few spelling and grammatical errors and there were a few things that seemed quite unrealistic, but overall: a job well done! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Leonard is a little scary. At first I thought that he was just a married older man who was (forgivably) a little entranced (forgive the pun) with one of his clients. That isn't unusual; attraction doesn't always recognize social and legal boundaries. But as each chapter progresses he seems more and more obsessive and possessive. If the trend continues, I can foresee him doing something stupid or malicious towards his competition or even towards Ally... ... so now I'll read on and see if that prediction is accurate. |
![]() ![]() don't know how many times I have read this story but it keeps getting better! And I already loved it the first time. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Love it! |
![]() ![]() big doggy slut |
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![]() ![]() lots of ups and downs in their relationship, but it has you reading |
![]() ![]() ![]() I am so confused... did she or did she not sleep with rob or what? |
![]() ![]() ok, so i was going to write a review after reading the whole story, but i just have to comment on this chapter. lol, first off, i'm a Red Sox fan so i love Rock. beautiful use of the word "wicked"...lol, and your story so far is wicked awesome (yes, i live near Boston, lol) anyway, Ally is such a nice character and i just love her so much! oh, and since this story has managed to keep my otherwise ADD attention, i will definitely read your other stories! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Okay, so this story is a billion years old, but I'm always a sucker for sports stories and yours didn't disappoint! I'd read the sequel now but it 2.19am and I need to go to bed lol. Mish xx |
![]() ![]() ![]() Ok wow I'm stupid. I just looked at all your other stories and seen there is a sequel and it made my day! Yeah! |
![]() ![]() ![]() I loved this story! I'm so happy to have found it on here. I kind of wished for a sequel :) Great job! |
![]() ![]() ![]() I cant believe that i only just found this story! it was so so great! thanks so much! :) |