|Reviews for To Become a Suitable Heroine|
| Iceberry the Dragon Cat chapter 14 . 7/13
Truthfully, I hate ash. He's just annoying and rude at this point.
I like ana alot, she's sweet and the ideal friend in this situation!
| Iceberry the Dragon Cat chapter 11 . 7/13
When your angry and in a hurry, you forget stuff easily. I know from experience xD
| Iceberry the Dragon Cat chapter 8 . 7/13
Lol, this is funny
| Iceberry the Dragon Cat chapter 3 . 7/12
*slaps the price for being a butt*
| Guest chapter 25 . 4/6
can I marry this story it is my favorite thank you so much for writing it I swear Ray is just like me and could this story get any better?!
| John Doe chapter 25 . 3/18
This book... was amazing. I don't know about you, but web novels always have some really bad ways to express romance stories. I remember reading 'The Return of the Condor Heroes', which is a great book, but the romantic misery was too much for me. I can't remember how many times I cursed myself for reading this constant loop of Xiao Long Nu running away as soon as she reunites with Yang Guo for the nth time. There is also 'A Naive, Short-tempered Girl', which I actually dropped because I couldn't handle the mental torture happening to Yao Yao, constantly, 24/7. If I were in her situation, I'd make sure to either move to a country where her pursuers are on the wanted list with the police, move into a Tibetan temple and gain enlightenment or kill myself. There is also almost every Japanese 'romance' novels, which include nothing but blatant 'accidental' fanservice with every onee-san/loli/imouto until the last sentence in the epilogue: "...and then I lived happily ever after with no romance at all, since I didn't notice any of the girlstrap were interested in me, and if anything happened, then I got conveniently concussed by the girl who doesn't want me to remember anything 'embarassing', and eventually they kept fighting over me and then I died a heroic death in my magical space mecha which runs off breast milk, when my troupe grew too old to be 'milked' THE END". Then, we come to the Chinese fantasy novels, where every time a woman is for some reason as talented as the MC even though he took [insert drugs here] pill v1.33.7 and better looking than everyone else in [insert zone here](and actually is nearly as likely as some Japanese works to be a loli), the main character will 'suavely' seduce them and eventually get about 7 wives who for some reason aren't opposed to letting him have millions of wives, and then only lose his virginity when he is 'forced' to for some random reason such as yin-yang fusion. But, I digress. There's probably some dusty books in a library that has much better romance in them. Anyway, I appreciate that this book finished less ambiguously than most, but it still follows the popular trend of light novels where the boy and girl kiss, then end of story. I don't really mind with this book to be honest, I find the end fitting. At least you didn't release 450 chapters of a romance manga which included a confession and kissing at the very last page, just before the big 'THE END' written right under the kissing silhouettes under the sunset. Again I digress. This story was great, it included actual feelings(probably, I don't really know, I don't usually experience them much. I have been called Satan once for being the emotionless ban-hammer wielder, as opposed to the mad banner, who would constantly do anything to make people swear at him so he can ban them, while I just... banned anyone without favoritism?), it looks to me like a story that was enjoyable to write, not just a moneymaking pile of cliches and fanservice. I don't know how to say it, but it feels more natural. The bad point, from my point of view(note really bad, I am just grumpy from overuse of this certain thing in the latest books I've read) are where people who are completely normal, apparently become 'scary', get yandere smiles and dark yandere eyes, and force the main character to do something that they don't like to do, simply because the plot deems it so. Well, at least it's a girl being forced to put on frilly dresses this time. *shudders* The last thing, why cat ears? Is it hereditary? is it a strange form of magic? Will she really grow angel wings? Will she ever get other magic? Will the royal princes and princesses of the next gen. become silver haired kittens wielding flashy purple magic? Why does she get cat instincts? And cat smell? Or even cat fall damage negation? And nothing else(yet)? Anyway, those questions are left unanswered. They probably don't need answering and the cat features might have been in there purely for comedy, not for story, but I have been ruminating over them while distractedly writing this review. By the way, I love the story, you should be happy. If you hadn't already got the message from the previous words anyway. Have a fun time writing things.
| TedWicken chapter 25 . 1/27
I just finished reading your story...and I must agree with you with was mushy, and cliche'. *shrugs* However, I suppose the story as a whole was very good. All stories are gems, gems that need a bit of polishing. You are again, correct, the only way I see this story improving is if you rewrite the entire thing with more description. Some things went too fast, others not fast enough, and the lack of description killed my soul. However all things considered, your base is sound, your 'voice' is lovely, and the way your writing comes out is so raw and real...you can really understand and love the character. A lot of people have trouble with this, either their character is too perfect, or they're the victim of life. You have done a stupendous job with mixing a believable real-life character, into a completely unbelievable story. Thus you deserve a good rating, and have earned a favorite from me. You had better expect my upcoming reviews on your other finished stories.
To Your General Health,
| Somebody chapter 25 . 12/30/2015
Your plea touched my replacement-for-heart ice.
Just one word: Awesome!
Maybe two: Heart touching.
Three?: Fabulously fantasticly mindblowing!
I. Loved. Every. Single. Moment. Of it!
| a person chapter 25 . 12/2/2015
This is not meant to offend but I agree with Imthecolourofnight. The ending wasnt great. It seemed like when you changed Ray's name (by accident or on purpose I dont know. Plus how can Ray be Ray when there is no y?) That ray died with the name. The last chapter depressed me, but at least you finished it. The most of the story was so funny and had a fair bit of action and a snarky/sarcastic ray and it was soooo good. Then the end was really cliched and rushed and Ray doesnt even talk like that and- it just depresses and annoys me that such a great story can have such a let down of an ending, again no offense. So yeah your writing style changed but at least try a bit. Yeah I know I'm a decade late but whatever. Thanks. Again, one more time, no offense. :-)
| josegote chapter 25 . 11/17/2015
Hey. I loved it. Really. so... yeah
There you go. Now you know i was one of the ones reading the story (i favorite tho)
hope u good
| Rka chapter 25 . 10/1/2015
*shrieks for a gajillion years* AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA I LVOE HTIS SO MUCH
| TheNextGamer chapter 25 . 9/29/2015
This was a good read.
Far better than all those stories with the girl in high school, going after the Bad Boy Angsty Angst dramatic, I hate my parents and my friends and my life and myself all at the same time forever and ever, stories.
Main character? Relatable. Fun. Cute. Ten times better than "high school girl that complains about everything in life."
Male Love Interest? Relatable. Charming. Ten times better than "Bad Boy McGee who rides motorcycles and broods a lot."
Main Rival? At least it's confirmed that she was mentally unstable.
All in all for me, second-best story out of all of fictionpress, first-best romance story out of all of fictionpress.
| Sigy Artyn chapter 25 . 7/21/2015
Hihi, I really enjoyed this story! Pkay, maybe you could have done more world-building, that sort of stuff, I dunno, but I felt that it was meant as a light and funny story to just enjoy and not take to seriously so I did that.
I laughed lots! It was really funny sometimes and I couldn't explain to others why I was laughing, heh, bjt I really did enjoy it, it was good! I like dhow it - she - was very honest, it was nice :)
Yup, really liked this! Thanks for writing!
| Ameila loves Anime chapter 25 . 7/7/2015
I really loved this story. Every character was full of personality, and Ray and Ash were adorable! This was constantly making me smile and I enjoyed every minute of it (even if I stayed up LITERALLY all night reading this and I'm in a serious need for sleep!-) Thank you SO much for writing this! You did a amazing job breathing life into every page. You are a wonderful writer.
| Cassarah chapter 25 . 6/29/2015
AMAZING book all the way through and I 3 your style of writing! ..