Reviews for Closer |
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![]() ![]() Hey, when are you going to update the story. Even though it has been a very, very, very long time, I would like to know how it ends. |
![]() ![]() you need to complete part two! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Please finish. Excellent story |
![]() ![]() ![]() I was laughing this WHOLE chapter! I LOVED it! lol I have to point out the KEY funny parts, hehe : "I'll call you when I'm done, sexy chocolate." LOL "Damn, you big for a white boy." "Hey, Dave, I'm leaving now. You coming?" Oh, bad choice of words. And there's probably more I'm leaving out, lol...Good story so far :) |
![]() ![]() ![]() "She then heard someone of the male persuasion ask her a question (something about "a fatal Raid can too?") in an all to nice rich and deep voice. She looked up and saw some white guy, correction, some good looking white guy who looked familiar... Oh, it's that Sean guy! Her white knight in shining- Old Navy." Lol, in old navy, that was funny...tat whole part was funny, lol. |
![]() ![]() ![]() I loved it, awesome job! I can't wait until you upload part two! |
![]() ![]() ![]() In actuality, there was a problem. Sean was no fool. Although he didn't know the exact difference, he knew there was one between the type of party he would normally go to and the type of party Rosalyn and her cousin was having. So instead of going and making an ass of himself alone, he decided to bring along his friends. That way, they could make asses of themselves together. LOL. Back 2 reading! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Wow...someone needs a psych doctor, lol...looking forward to more. I like the fact he came to his senses. They make a very cute couple. Wish I had your talent. |
![]() ![]() ![]() I didn't realize you'd updated...or did you tellme and it slipped my mnd? I love this story, and am sad that Sean is being this way. I can't think of much else to say really, lol. Oh, I no longer have writers block lol |
![]() ![]() ![]() Wow, is that a crazy ex or something? I really like this story, I have it saved on my bookmarks, and today I went on your profile, and it said you updated in May, which I had no idea about. Hope you update again soon. Lovely story. |
![]() ![]() ![]() I was looking at how many reviews u have and I was wondering...am i your hundreth reviewer? if I am! WOOT WOOT! Go me! but go you too because I love this story! Great plot, great details and it's just...AWESOME! |
![]() ![]() Great ending! I can't wait to read the sequel. Your writing is wonderful, and I would love to read more of your work! |
![]() ![]() The scene was perfect! It shows how they've grown, different from a first time teenager. Great chapter. Hikari-chan |
![]() ![]() Wow. Let me just say... That was the most beautiful intimate love scene of a 'first time' I've ever read. Jeeze, if every woman could expierence a first time like the one I just read now, the world would be a better place! Hikari-chan ~_ |
![]() ![]() Double 07 and Mario Cart were my games back in the day! That's all we played on the nintendo 64. That small piece really made me feel connected to the characters, and now I love your story even more! Hahaha! Now you're stuck with me... Keep up the great work! |