aww that's terribly sad... but it's got a good effect, i liked it and thank u for your reviews.

wow, really sad, in the end, depicts the nature humanity seemingly expresses most often... love the first and last verses, very nice rhyming, very good! youre talented!
and thanks for the review

That is a very beautiful poem, and I loved it. I just want to say, that I am impressed by the number of reviewers you have. Keep writing, and hopefully I'll be back later to read more! luv ya!

i think i've told u this before but i never got to review...ehehe...but this is SO good! e! love it! hope u write more soon...

Oh good. Sorta sad that you only have 2 poems. You're good. Talented and skilled with a pen, pencil, and keyboard.

This had a nice rhythm to it. I like the descriptions and I like the rhyme scheme. It's nice.

this is a good little story poem. it gives good detail without breaking the rythem of the poem. my only issue is that it's a bit too blunt. I know you wrote this a long time ago... but I think that you might like to go over it again and see if you can try to convey a deeper meaning instead of just telling a story in poetry. ya dont have to listen to me though. Do what ya like in the end

I really like this poem. The way it tells a story, and how descriptive it is. My favorite part is the ending though, real powerful. Good job, keep it up.
p.s. Thanks for the review

some of this is really powerful but it doesnt flow as well as it could. no offence meant, i like it. its original.

Sad story but wonderful poem. I like the repaeting thing that you've done again :)
Keep up the great work!
*lime-girl*

that is so sad... such an innocent death...

I really like this poem. I love unicorns .. they're so pretty! ' Anyway, some of the verses just don't seem to flow right ... they seem almost like you started them but wasn't exactly sure what to add next. But it wasn't too bad or anything. I love the use of repetition for the first and last verses. Very well done! :)

I really enjoyed reading your poem. You have a gift, use it well. Oh yes! Nice work! ;) Buh- bye! *Hands you a basket of cupcakes and skips off into the depths of the woods*

I am not a poet! I should change my penname to this!
Anyway, I liked this poem. I liked the beginning and the ending stanza being the same. It seems to have a very nice beat to it. Sad story, though, but life is full of sad stories, and man is just as cruel many times.

such a sad story, why are you saying that your poems aren't as good as mine?