Reviews for Ransom
icthus chapter 11 . 6/19/2004
I love the story so far! Your descriptions are simply superb, and I love how you write from one person's point of view and then back track to write the same instance from another person's (namely switching back and forth between Pearl and Captain Valentine). At first glance at the summary of the story, I very nearly passed over it, but I am very glad I didn't.
From the first paragraph I was sucked into your story, as I'm sure you'll be pleased to hear. Please update soon!
person chapter 11 . 6/3/2004
aw. looks like it's wont be that bad for her...yet? loe your story. keep writing, and UPDATE!
RainyDaySunlight chapter 10 . 5/24/2004
Concerning Tortuga, it is actually a very real place that was well known for being a pirate 'hangout'. I know it was also used in the movie, but there is no other town like it that I am aware of. Possibly, I will change the name of the place, if I can come up with another. I just wanted to use Tortuga because most people have heard of it and are aware of its reputation. Again, nothing to do with the movie. Many pirate movies and stories involve Tortuga, not just "POTC". Thanks again for the review...Nat
Individual-9086 chapter 10 . 5/23/2004
Tortuga huh?
Well, you already heard my two cents about the Pirates of the Caribbean thing so I won't comment. It is your decision regarding the degree of originality pursued in your story.
Anyway, I am glad you updated, for I still like this story. The plot seems to be coming along nicely.
Individual-9086 chapter 8 . 5/23/2004
In the following excerpt the word 'here should be hear':
“Can you here me?”
There are a few gramatical and spelling errors here, but nothing to major.
However, all in all I think that this is a really great chapter. I like how the relationship between your two main characters seems to be changing so quickly.
Natalie chapter 6 . 5/20/2004
I just wanted to say thanks for all the reviews! I appreciate all the helpful suggestions, I truly do, please keep them coming! In response to a few of the comments made by Individual-9086, I'd just like to add some of my own. I agree that I am most likely abusing some of the "historical" pirate language, but to be honest I am not too sure how to use it perfectly, so please bare with me! I am a huge fan of pirates, and have been for well ever. I don't want people to think that I am trying to copy the "POTC", even though it is a great movie, I had the idea to write this books, way before that movie was ever released. About using the word "aquiescing", I honestly did not mean to echo any dialogue from the movie, in fact I had just learned that word in my vocabulary words in English class at school and that was pure coincidence! But now that I think about it, I probably will change it because I want this story to be fully my own! I completely understand your irritation with some of my chapters, trust me I'm quite often irritated myself, and at times have trouble making the things I write work as well on paper as they do in my head. Oh and if you re-read ch 6, you'll realise that Pearl never actually took the knife, if was only offered to her, but she refused it. Anyway, I know that this is a long review...but I just wanted to clear some things up because all comments are helpful to me and my writing, and I want you all to enjoy my story as much as possible! Please continue to read and review! Oh by the way, I know it's been a while since I've written, but I just returned from a weekend to California, where I managed to do a lot of writing, and will be updating within the next few days! Please stay tuned! I promise not to leave you hanging! Thanx... Love, Nat
Individual-9086 chapter 7 . 5/19/2004
Oh no! A cliffhanger!
Now I insist that you update this soon. I stumbled onto this story by chance, but now I am hooked. Please, please, please update!
Individual-9086 chapter 6 . 5/19/2004
Does Pearl still have the knife? Hmm..
Individual-9086 chapter 5 . 5/19/2004
Oh, how horrible! Poor Pearl. Forget what I said about her falling in love with el capitan.
Anyway, I forgive your last chapter because this one was great. I hope you keep updating and don't leave me stranded on this story!
Individual-9086 chapter 4 . 5/19/2004
she can tie her own corset? That certainly is a wonder.
The part about her "aquiescing" to dinner with the captain was very annoying. Could you be any more obvious about ripping off the Pirates of the Caribbean?
This truthfully wasn't my favorite chapter, it seemed too contrived... Still, I have not stopped loving your story. I just am a bit annoyed at this chapter.
Individual-9086 chapter 3 . 5/19/2004
Aw.. how sweet. I sshe going to fall in love with the captain? Or maybe fate has planned an interlude with Wesley. Then again, it may have been Felix in her heart all along. You have me hooked- so you must keep writing this!
Individual-9086 chapter 1 . 5/19/2004
This is a really great story so far and I would love to read more. The one thing that is bugging me though is that your dialogue gets a little repetitive. I highly doubt that pirates actually said "me hearties" in every other sentence. I also think that you are using a few words, like "avast" incorrectly.
Anyway, other than that, your story is fantastic. I love the pirates theme, I have a pirate story of my own. Keep writing! I love this!
Sing With The Elevator Music chapter 7 . 2/27/2004
o its getting good! i cant wait for more please update. :)
Justme chapter 7 . 2/23/2004
Wow,good story.. I like it. It is in the romantic section for a reason, right? Nothing has really happened. Still very good! I think she and Wesley should be together. What the heck? She can't just give up... $5 says Wesleys saves watch me be wrong. Well, g2g, tata. Keep up.
Cheese and DG chapter 1 . 2/23/2004
That was realy good! The last paragraph confused me a little, but im sure i'll figure everything out eventually. I'll read the rest when i have time. Good story!
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