Wow! This is a very good story. It kept me on the edge of my seat. Thanks so much for sharing it!

That was just...beyond awesome

Hm...not bad at all. Really reminded me of something Frank Peretti would write.
Gotta start with the criticism part of constructive criticism: Seemed a little cheesy at times. Maybe that's just because of a conflict of beliefs-I believe that Christians are not involved in spiritual warfare as warriors. I believe our place is prayer, and to cast out demons, while the angels are here for the combat. I guess that's not so much a criticism as a difference of belief-dangit...already said that...
Now for the constructive part:
This was pretty well-written. It flowed pretty good. It was like the story was greased, and as I read, my eyes just kept slipping down it.
Bleh. Bad simile. lol. Couldn't stop reading it. Your sentences didn't get choppy and halting. I like that.
Ever read This Present Darkness by Frank Peretti? I think you'd like that. Wish I'd started writing Christian supernatural stuff sooner...I'm prewriting for my first right now.
T. L. Houlin

Hey. I enjoyed this...I liked the way you made spiritual warfare so...real.

Great story, and really well written!
hanakin2