Reviews for Everything Fails, Then Burns and Dies
Summerdazed chapter 1 . 1/6/2004
lovely, full of emotions, but I think you can make it longer if you want. :O)
Rocky G chapter 1 . 12/18/2003
A short good poem. I like the line "How would you run if it all came undone?" That's a really cool line.
Namir Swiftpaw chapter 1 . 12/18/2003
"The" in the second line should be "they".
It's an all right poem. Not bad, but not exceptional, either.
I can see the attempted internal rhyme, though...nice effort.
Keep writing.
~Namir Swiftpaw
Now-silenced chapter 1 . 12/18/2003
That is so bizarre, I mean the change in case. Is it intentional, even if it isn't I think it is interesting. Short and to the point. I like it.