I laughed insanly! WONDERFUL!

Hahaha awesome :D loved it well done

First of all, what the hell?

The pov switches are a little hard to follow, but overall, it's truly a good story. I like that the parents give off the "you don't know what I know" vibe. It angers me beyond belief, but its a unique character trait.

That's hilarious! I am well and truly in love with Josh. This story would do well with some basic editing, but it's very good, save for that.

i'm extremely confused. who's pov is the story taking place? it seems to be changing with no indication of the switch.

You need to specify when you're going to cane PoV's. It can get quite confusing.

Other than that it is great. Spectaculay. You have a nice vocabulary, or you know how to use a thesaurus. Good job!

See ya! (not literally, but i feel goodbye is for final partings)

It was a good story. The plot was halarious and made me laugh. I was smiling and laughing throughout; I mean the parents are very esentric and creative. I LOVED the collar part. And the plot is amazing along with the events and complex characters.

Your story line is complex and creative so you have great potential but your writing syle is somewhat bland with not much umph. Although you could live without improving your style(seeing as the characters and plot make up for it); I think you should make which character is speaking more clear: some ways without rewriting the story are ~*~ sepperating characters or Writing a header such as _Chloe POV:_, _Blake POV:_, _Parent's POV:_, and _Omnecient POV:_.

If I didn't know that there was a gap in the time it took to complete this work, I think I would have been able to tell. It seems to be (and I could be wrong) that there is an inconsistancy. Something is missing from what was in the first few chapters. It's a difficult feeling to explain, I don't feel let down, but then I don't feel like I climbed the apex of the plot and went down for a smooth ending if that makes sense. You mentioned in a profile update that you love the anti-climax. Is this shown in the ending?

There were some elements that you worked on that I think could have thrown some excellent twists into the story: like Josh's character. At first I wanted to cream the punk for moving in on his buddy's girl but then he just kind of faded away. Same thing with the female that ended up with Kevin.

To me it seemed like the last couple of chapters were building up and then woosh, over with. I did leave some positive comments on the chapters, I enjoyed reading them but over all, looking at the big picture the above is what I have to say. The characters are still having comical battles in my head and will probably be something I look back and enjoy a laugh at so overall, it was an entertaining read.

I just wanted to take some more time and give it a more thorough review.

Its definitely shaping up for a good ending. Can't wait :)

Ha! I knew it! I knew he was going to let her go immediately!

I am glad I picked this up again. It's been a long time since I've been on this website and actually caught up with some of the writers I followed. I think my most favorite part was when Chloe jump kicked Blake in the head and de pantsed him. I was laughing out loud a lot, the other people in the office probably think I'm nuts. Oh well. Great stuff!

Read it all. It was a weird theme, one that needed more than its sare of slapsticl humour, which existed more than enough. For a light reading only, is my humble opinion (ok, not so humble since I am voicing it...)

You haven't updated in so long! I was really looking forward tot he next chapter. Hopefully you haven't stopped writing. Love the plot but I think we need an accidental kiss! (Way hyper- sorry.) I'd also like Chloe to have a fight with Kevin in English, so she can say: You're the best English Student. You figure out what kiss-my-ass means!

I see there are more chapters from when I last read. That is most good. I shall return and enjoy the rest. :)

These chapters never cease to amuse me. For some reason I don't really need to know what the parents are up to, well I would like to, I guess the sense of reality (would anyone out there really do this to their kids?) just doesn't have to be there for me. Its fine as it as, the humor is still there and I am very glad you are updating again. I've been away from for quite some time so this is nice to come back to.

The class scene made me laugh the most. "Ah, a weak one" that was great!